八下英语作文讲评【一】
又是绵绵的小雨，我来到了外婆的坟前，四周一片寂静。坟上，已经开出了小小的紫花，那是外婆最喜欢的。“外婆，我来了。”我轻轻地呼唤着。可是，却没有人回答。我的眼泪一滴滴地落下，勾起了对外婆的回忆。
生１：景与情结合得好，把作者带到特定的情境中。
生２：有些语言还不够自然，最后一句改成“我轻轻地呼唤着，眼泪一滴滴落下，历历往事涌上心头”更好些。
八下英语作文讲评【二】
上次作文过程中，同学们都深刻地体味了一次“琐忆”，今天，我们来一起讨论一下大家手中的文章片段，看看他们“忆”的怎么样。
八下英语作文讲评【三】
--姐，天气凉了，可增添了衣裳？
生：一句问候情意深长，余味无穷。
师：好。看来关于文章结尾的评价我也没有更多的话要说了。下面请大家接着谈谈关于写人记叙文结尾要注意的方面，可以结合一些典型范例来谈。
生１：要能呼应开头，总结全文，揭示主题。
生２：要能抒发真情，感染读者。
生３：最好能令人回味，发人深思。
生４：结束语应像豹尾，简短有力。
生５：我还是觉得臧克家《老哥哥》一文的结尾值得我们学习：“又是秋天了。秋风最能吹倒老年人！我已经能赚银币了，老哥哥还能等得及接受吗？”
师：大家做了非常好的总结，关于结尾的要求我也进一步用四个字来概括一下（板书）：揭旨升华。“揭旨”就是揭示主题；“升华”是指使情感、境界能进入更高层次，耐人咀嚼回味。为了便于大家理解，我将写人记叙文的要求最后浓缩成五个字（板书）：格、事、脉、戏、情。“格”就是写人记叙文（其实所有文章都这样）要中间大两头小的格式，也就是说是起、承、转、合的基本模式；“事”就是要有特定的事情，具体的描述；“脉”就是脉相连，所写的事与事之间有内在联系。这三个字体现了文章的基本要求。“戏”就是记事富有戏剧性，有跌宕起伏、扣人心弦的情节；“情”就是字里行间饱蘸感情，用真情撞击读者心扉。
八下英语作文讲评【四】
This is my first week in ** Senior Middle School.Everything here is new for me.Our school is an old school but it`s very beautiful.I have 50 new classmates in my class.They`re all very excellent, I think, and I felt a little sad.Because I`m too common.But come to think of it,it`s a very good thing.I believe I can also be very excellent if I study with such excellent classmates.I didn`t know why Ms *** chose me to be the committee of study.But I know it`s a good chance for me to raise my ability.All I can do is do my best in the future.I am sure that Ms *** and my classmates can help me when I do something wrong. Because they`re all very kind.It`s a pleasure to work and study with them.I`m really very happy.I`m not an outstanding student in this class,but I can do the same thing like others.I believe I won`t make anyone disappointed.
八下英语作文讲评【五】
When I was a freshman in college I watched the film Gua Sha Treatment for the first time, now I am a junior student and I come back to review the movie from a multicultural aspect, I have many different feelings after watching the film again.
At the beginning of the film, XuDatong is given an award and later he delivers a speech. What makes me impressed most is in his speech he says “one day I will become one of you, a truly successful American, today this award proved that America is a true land of opportunity and I am the living proof of that.” At that moment Xu thinks he has realized his American Dream totally with his lovingly wife and adorable son. However, I think it is ironical that to make a speech like that and I assume it is made on purpose to hind a clue for the story\'s development. How many non—American people have such a beautiful American dream? One of my classmate studies in American now and before he went aboard he told me his American dream is he can stand at the top of the New York. To be honest, I also dream that one day I can get the Green Card living there happily and successfully maybe working at the Wall Street. When Xu gets the award he thinks he entirely melted in the melting pot neglecting the multicultural obstruct, later the plot goes against the way he thinks. And later Quinlan asked Xu\'why you be the scapegoat of your father?\' Xu answers \'because he is Chinese.\' Then maybe Xu knows that there is always a wide gap between Chinese and American cultures.
The second scene is Xu hit his son Denis because Denis hit the son of xu\'s boss, at the middle of the film xu tells his boss that he hit his own son is only to show his respect to his boss John Quinlan, that time Quinlan feels puzzled “what a Chinese logic”,yes, American can never understand such a logic full of Chinese characteristic, because they respect everyone including the children, they won\'t beat a child to please the boss, and there is no such a conception of degree between employee and employer, they feel everyone is equal, which is quite different from china.
Connected to the second scene, the third difference I want to analyze is the care for the children. In America, people pay more attention to the right of children which can be seen from the law—leaving children alone at home is illegal, while in China it is so common that almost everyone may experience such loneliness. And Children Welfare Agency does work in America which shows the importance Americans attach to children\'s right. What\'s more, I remember a line \'No one won the case, especially the child.\' In my opinion, it also manifests the universal concern from the American public to the children.
The fourth aspect is following the procedure, in the film, more than there times, the people focus on the rule, the law, the procedure. At the Christmas Eve Xu wants to return back to his home pretending as a Santa Claus, what a pity, the security recognizes him and persuades \'you are always a good tenement, never causes troubles for me.\' And another scene is at the end of the film , the judge says \'I have to follow the procedure.\' However, in China people always have to ask for a favor to do something, and later you have to pay back the favor,for myself, I prefer the American style, strict to the procedure.
The fifth and the last point is the humors, Quinlan says \'you can\'t fall, your health security is the company paid.\' \'Datong, welcome home, maybe next time, you can come from the front door.\' \'dady, why you come from the window\' \' because we don\'t have a chimney.\' I really adore this distinguished American humor, especially in dangerous situations, which is quite rare in China.
That\'s my whole reaction to Gua Sha Treatment.
八下英语作文讲评【六】
Father's Day
Yesterday was Father's Day. I had planned to give my father a present. But I didn't remember it until in the morning.It was too late to post a card to him. So I decided to buy something. When I was in the department store. I found it was not easy for me to choose something right for him. Suddenly I
got an idea. I ran home and opened my computer. I made a beautiful card and mailed him through the Internet. then I began to make supper. When father came home, he was very glad to find a big meal on the table. then I asked him to check his e-mail. He was amazed to find a beautiful card in his e-mail-box.
What a wonderful surprise!
