I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
This is my first week in ** Senior Middle School.Everything here is new for me.Our school is an old school but it`s very beautiful.I have 50 new classmates in my class.They`re all very excellent, I think, and I felt a little sad.Because I`m too common.But come to think of it,it`s a very good thing.I believe I can also be very excellent if I study with such excellent classmates.I didn`t know why Ms *** chose me to be the committee of study.But I know it`s a good chance for me to raise my ability.All I can do is do my best in the future.I am sure that Ms *** and my classmates can help me when I do something wrong. Because they`re all very kind.It`s a pleasure to work and study with them.I`m really very happy.I`m not an outstanding student in this class,but I can do the same thing like others.I believe I won`t make anyone disappointed.
他痛感19世纪与20世纪之交的欧洲是一个动不安,弥漫着腐败风气的社会,是一个需要伟人的社会,他为此写了《名人传》。叙述贝多芬,米开朗琪罗和托尔斯泰的苦难和坎坷的一生,赞美他们高尚品格和顽强奋斗的精神。他是谁呢,他就是20世纪上半叶法国著名的人道主义作家罗曼·罗兰。
罗曼·罗兰是一个非常爱国的人道主义作家。《名人传》是其代表作之一。《名人传》与其他传统不同,《名人传》使我们看到了德国音乐家贝多芬,意大利画家和雕塑家米开朗琪罗。俄国作家列夫·托尔斯泰他们与常人一样有自己的痛苦,挣扎和矛盾。尽管他们的事业不同,贡献不同,所处的时代和国家不同,但都是各自领域里的`常人。他们在肉体上和精神上经历了人生的种种磨难,却为创造不朽的杰作,贡献了毕生的精力。罗曼·罗兰指出人生的坎坷,生活中充满了贫困,忧虑,孤独和辛劳,人们却彼此隔膜不懂得互相安慰,所以他写《名人传》。要把伟大的力量献给受苦难的人们,使其得到安慰。
罗曼·罗兰认为英雄的伟大不在于他的体魄,而在于他的心灵及其品格。他认为唯有实在的苦难,才能使人不抱幻想,直面人生;唯有真实的苦难,才能使人经受残酷的命运。因此,伟人们的生活往往是长期受难,他们的身心遭受悲惨,命运的折磨,然而也正是忧患造就他们的们的未来。贝多芬、米开朗琪罗这样的人才竟然终身未婚,未能享受他们真正的爱情,而托尔斯泰夫妻之间持续数十年的不理解,这是他的悲剧最直接根源。他们在社会上受到了最冷酷的对待。贝多芬面对的是怀着敌意的城市维也纳,他的音乐受到了欢呼,他的困难却无人过问;米开朗琪罗除了为教皇服务外,他每从事一项工程,都必然遭到一些卑鄙下流之士出于嫉妒和怨恨,对他进行恶毒的攻击,托尔斯泰面对的则是整个贵族上流社会,以免于被认为“叛教者”,从而开除了教籍。
贝多芬写给友人阿芒达牧师的信中提到耳聋之事,可想而知,耳朵对于音乐家而言是多么重要!不仅影响自己的工作,也导致他过着孤独凄凉的生活,这一切可以看到当时社会的冷酷无情,人与人之间的冷漠、自私。
从《贝多芬传》的最后一段可以看出贝多芬的伟大,不仅在于他是杰出的音乐家,而是因为他的音乐是为苦难的人们而写的,他隐藏自己的痛苦,却用他的痛苦换来欢乐来安慰人们,给人们一种力量。
一个遭受不幸和排斥的人,要在孤独中去,要么不屈服地抗争,这三们伟人属于后者,贝多芬在生命的末日写出了不朽的《欢乐颂》,米开朗琪罗直到临终的几天还刮着雕像,终于留下传世巨作,托尔斯泰直到生命最后一刻,才下定了摆脱贵族的决心。
他们为我们树立了高大的形象,罗曼·罗兰的写作技术值得我们肯定,要想独树一帜,就要寻求最佳解决途径,要有成功的心态,有成功心态者,处处都能发觉成功的力量。
耳边回响起铿锵的音乐。
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
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