小学生优秀作文带批注【一】
生活中，小学生购买手机的现象是日益增多了，现在我觉得现在小学生使用手机已经是不可避免的事实。所以今天我们要讨论一下：小学生上学要不要该带手机。
首先，家长当时为小学生购买手机的初衷仅仅是为了能与他们随时取得联系，但有的时候结果总是会适得其反，有一些贪玩的小学生，就会在放学路上玩手机游戏，或者与其他的同学一起讨论自己的手机。这使得一些同学忘记了写作业，更有甚者是无心去学习。
其次，现在的手机，都有游戏等不利于少年的东西，这些都会浪费同学们的时间。退一万步说，手机的主要功能是什么？通话。但我们是小学生，每天都生活在学校里，有什么事情非跟家长报告呢？这对我们培养自主学习能力很不利。
再其次，万一手机掉了怎么办，一部手机最起码五六百元吧！万一丢了，那可是巨大的损失。
通过以上的几点，小学生带手机是有百害而无一益的事情，所以我认为，小学生不要带手机上学。
小学生优秀作文带批注【二】
打开尘封的记忆，首先浮现在眼前的就是那个“温暖”的冬天，我和她手牵手，在冬日底下……
第一次见到她，高个子，微胖，扎着马尾辫，身穿一件长袖T恤和一条休闲牛仔，面无表情，看起酷酷的样子。后来不知怎么回事，迷迷糊糊的，我们成为了好朋友。她乐观开朗，大大咧咧。而我极其内向，沉默寡言。我们性格迥异，最后却成为了知己，到现在我也弄不清原因。她很勤劳、很勇敢、很善良、很大方、很执着……当然，她也很冲动、很暴躁、很贪玩、很迷糊……
那天，刺骨的寒风无情地撕扯着干枯的树枝，街上的行人寥寥无几，地上堆积的洁白的雪还未融化，一片银装素裹……在公园里，有两个女孩，穿着厚厚的棉袄，围着围巾，戴着帽子，手牵着手，另一只手里拿着热气腾腾的包子，边吃边一起说笑。时而两人开怀大笑；时而两人伤感哭泣；时而手牵手散着步；时而背靠背唱着歌……就这样，两个女孩踩着雪，一步一个脚印，伴随着“嘎吱嘎吱的声音，绕着公园走了一圈又一圈……天气虽冷，心却温暖……
那段日子，纯真，美好，简单，浪漫。那时，我们在一起看“人狗奇缘”，哭的稀里哗啦，一塌糊涂；那时，每天我几乎都会吃到雪糕，而那却不是我掏的钱；那时，我们偶尔会吵吵小架，但几分钟后又迅速和好；那时，我们一起聊天聊到深夜，结果第二天上学迟到；那时她不好意思向一高年级男生问题，结果还是我去问了再告诉她；那时，我被欺负了，她会替我打抱不平；那时，我们一起为考试而拼搏；那时，我们手牵手，在冬日底下……
毕业后，我们各奔东西，有了新的学习和生活。我们依然保持着联系。那段日子，我永远也不会忘记，我很想再和她在一起学习，于是我们约定好，将来要考进同一所高中，这个约定使我更加努力的拼搏。我期待着，我们将在一起度过我们美好的青春年华。
又是一个冬天，有谁愿意与我手牵手，在冬日底下…
批注：这是一篇感情真挚的叙事散文，作者着重描写了与同学的学习往事，语言朴实流畅，故事饱满圆润，人物形象突出。文章中运用了排比的修辞手法，增强了语气。全文结构安排合理，首尾呼应，有极强的回读意味。
小学生优秀作文带批注【三】
I don't know when a salesman came to the bridge on one side of the school. I was attracted by the melodious music.
卖艺人的琴技不仅吸引了我，也吸引了很多人：他的`手中握着一把破旧不堪的二胡，一只手捏着二胡上的弦，一只手握着弓来回地拉着，好听的音乐像小溪的溪水一样从琴弦上奔涌了出来，银铃般的声音组成了一首首乐曲，从琴弦上流淌了下来，让围成了一圈的观众听地如痴如醉，一曲终了，总能赢得观众的一片掌声。
The craftsman's piano skill not only attracted me, but also attracted many people: he held a shabby erhu in his hand, a string on it in his hand, and a bow in his hand. The beautiful music rushed out of the string like the stream water, and the sound like a silver bell formed a piece of music, which flowed down from the string, making a circle of views The audience is infatuated with the music. At the end of the song, they can always win a round of applause from the audience.
我，也就一边吃着东西，一边站在一旁静静地欣赏。
I, as I eat, stand by and enjoy it quietly.
只要没有什么特殊情况，卖艺人就会坐在桥边，拉琴，我呢，也总会驻足停留，站在一旁静静地看。
As long as there is no special situation, the seller will sit by the bridge and play the piano. I will always stop and watch quietly.
经常是看他拉琴，也有时候，会盯着他的脸看一会儿。
I often watch him play the piano, and sometimes I stare at his face for a while.
他不说话，但他似乎在用琴向人们诉说着心中的情感。他的皮肤皱皱的，被太阳晒成了古铜色，神情冷漠而淡然，一副与世隔绝的样子。
He doesn't speak, but he seems to be using the piano to tell people the feelings in his heart. His skin was wrinkled, bronzed by the sun, cold and indifferent, isolated.
我见他能弹这么好听的曲子，便萌生了一个念头：投一些钱给他。
When I saw that he could play such a good tune, I had an idea: give him some money.
说干就干，我立刻把身上的几枚硬币搜罗了出来，小心翼翼地向卖艺人走去，我不敢靠得太近，就远远地站着，把手中的一个硬币向那个铜碗投去。哐啷！那枚硬币碰了一下碗的边缘，又弹开了，咕噜咕噜地滚出了好远。
Just do it, I immediately found some coins on my body and walked carefully to the salesman. I dare not lean too close, so I stood far away and threw a coin into the copper bowl. Clang! The coin touched the edge of the bowl, bounced open again, and rolled out a long way.
卖艺人像是被惊着了似的，忽一下睁开了亮亮的眼睛，但那一束稍纵即逝——眼里的光暗淡了下去。正当我想着要不要去拾起硬币时，已经有人捡起了它，扔进了碗里。卖艺人的眼睛又闭了上去，琴声悠扬。
The entertainer seemed to be startled. Suddenly, he opened his bright eyes, but the light in those eyes was dim. Just as I was thinking about whether to pick up the coin, someone had picked it up and thrown it into the bowl. The seller's eyes are closed again, and the music is melodious.
终于把钱投了进去。我如同获了大赦一样，伴着悠扬的琴声，踏着欢快的步子，离开了卖艺人。
Finally put the money in. As if I had been granted an amnesty, with the melodious sound of the piano and the happy steps, I left the salesman.
小学生优秀作文带批注【四】
My mother is very beautiful. Round face, big eyes, long hair.
妈妈很爱干净，总是把家里收拾得整整齐齐、干干津津的。
My mother loves to be clean. She always cleans up her family.
妈妈很爱我们。每天我放学回家，爸爸下班回家，妈妈总是为我们准备好点心。晚上还烧可口的饭菜给我们吃。吃过饭，妈妈辅导我做作业。有时等我睡下后还要为我们准备明天的东西。
Mom loves us very much. Every day I come home from school, my father comes home from work, and my mother always prepares snacks for us. We also cook delicious food for us in the evening. After dinner, my mother tutored me to do my homework. Sometimes I have to prepare tomorrow's things for us after I go to bed.
妈妈，你是我们全家最辛苦的人。我爱你，我亲爱的妈妈！
Mom, you are the hardest person in our family. I love you, my dear mother!
