今天,我看了感动中国。里面有许许多多社会上的好人。
给我印像最深刻的是最美教师——张莉丽。她是黑龙江省佳木斯市第十九中学初三(3)班班主任。她曾经抚养过一个残疾的孩……
某天,一辆大型汽车上的驾驶员误碰操纵杆导致汽车朝着两个过马路的学生冲去。身后的张莉丽看到了这一幕,把身后两个准备过马路的学生往后一推,立刻扑向那两个马上要被撞的学生,用力一推,把两个学生推到了一边,自己却碾到了车下。在那一刻,她在学生的安全和自己的双腿之间毫不犹豫地选择了学生的安全。
接着,是主持人为她阅读颁奖词:
别哭,孩子,那是你们人生最美的一课。你们的老师,她失去了双腿,却给自己插上了翅膀;她大你们不多,却让我们学会了许多。都说人生没有彩排,可即便再面对那一刻,这也是她不变的选择。
然后,那块石碑上就刻着七个醒目的红字:“冰雪为容玉作胎”,片刻宁静后,这七个大字便消失了,现在石碑上刻着的是她的名字。同时,两位小学生迈着整齐的步伐走出来,一个人捧着鲜花,一个人端着奖杯。坐在轮椅上的张莉丽阿姨接过来,一手捧着鲜花,一手端着奖杯向观众挥手。
今天,我们在学校观看了《感动中国》。里面一共介绍了10个人物,每个人的故事都很感动我,有一生奉献给核事业,工作到生命最后一刻的科学家林俊德;有坚持五年背着生病母亲上下班,为年轻人作出榜样的孝子陈斌强,但让我记忆最为深刻的是为救出学生失去双腿,被网民赞为最美的女教师——张丽莉。
张丽莉是一名优秀的老师,她很爱自己的学生,每个同学也都很敬慕她,亲切地叫她丽莉老师。在同学眼中看来,丽莉老师就像妈妈一样无微不至地照顾着他们,但是,不幸降临在这位和蔼可亲的老师身上:一天放学时,老师和几个同学在过马路的时候,一辆大客车迎面而来,丽莉老师奋不顾身地把其它学生推开,同学们安然无恙,可是丽莉老师却终身失去了自己的双腿。至今,张丽莉老师身体还在恢复中……
张丽莉虽然是一名普通教师,但她为了别人不惜牺牲自己,有着常人不具备的勇气,在平凡的岗位上作出了不平凡的事迹。她不仅感动了你,感动了我,感动了他,还感动了全中国,我们应该向张丽莉老师致敬,并以她为榜样,向她学习。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某个决定作为议论的话题
As a student, I am strongly in favour of the decision. (亮明自己的观点是赞成还是反对
The reasons for this may be listed as follows. (过渡句,承上启下
正文:
第2段:First of all... Secondly... Besides...(列出2~3个赞成或反对的`理由
结论:
第3段:In conclusion, I believe that... (照应第1段,构成\"总—分—总\"结构
导入:
第1段:提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文:
第2段:Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论:
第3段:These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
华丽的屏幕映在我的心中,为他们的事迹感动。
在这些人群里,有的是为了国家事业而忘我工作,直到自己的生命结束,令人敬佩,有的为家人,为他人平凡的付出,有的为了孩子,失去双脚,但她却拥有了一双隐形的翅膀。
高淑珍今年56岁,是河北滦县司各庄镇洼里村的一名普通农村妇女。因为她的儿子王立国4岁那年落下了残疾,不能上学,便想在家里办个小学堂,后来她发现也有一些因残疾不能上学的孩子,便在家里举办了学校,自己的女儿王国光是老师。
这学校一开就是14年。在这十几年的时间里,她收了近百名得残疾孩子,但却未收过一分钱。接受的孩子越来越多,虽然高淑珍精力有限,负债累累,但她却从未对那些慕名而来的孩子们说“不\"字。无论有多困苦,她总是尽自己最大的努力,只为能让孩子们的生活过得好一点些。“我一天出去挣十块二十块,给孩子们买点好吃的,我心里头欢喜,骑着车子都有劲。”她说。
像高淑珍那样的人还有很多:林俊德、陈斌强、何玥、高秉涵、陈家顺、张丽莉、李文波、周月华、艾起、罗阳。记住这些名字吧,正是因为这样的人,才让我们的家园,这个世界,充满光明,充满浓浓的,甜蜜的,感动人心的爱。
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
从学校出来,一路走来,有过一片荒凉,又有一片繁华。但是,就在这条路上,我看到过很多,但是它一直都在,从来都在那里。
门口有一些超市,但那里面的东西对于我们这些住校生简直是种奢侈。走过一条蜿蜒的小路,便会看见一片农田,若是如今前去,那低垂着收获的麦穗,那片金黄无边无垠,就是这喧嚣城市中一点质朴的点缀。又若是晚春或是夏初前来,还能看见田间劳作的老农。又走过一些路程,就会有一些待拆的民房,已经没有人住了,曾经这是一些老式的`成都建筑,住的也都是那些老成都人,有些质朴,很可爱的人。可却随岁月消逝了。
走过这段荒凉之后,便是繁华的成都市区了。我的第一个目的地是一个车站,或许很久也没有一辆车,但是我却从没有过失望,或许我比较开朗吧,又或许这让我有一丝闲暇去回忆先前走过的路吧。当车开来了,我微笑的走上去即使没有座位。
路上有耸入云间的高楼,有气派的酒店,有纵横交错的立交桥;也有古朴的民居,清澈的小溪,还有这溪上人声鼎沸的小桥。一路下来,有太多太多,便也不一一细说了。
或许一路下来我一直都没有坐到座位,或许坐到了,又让给了老人,但是总没什么的。下车了,到小区还有些路程,这里有一片绿荫,一片清幽的地方。好一会儿,走到了门口。那门卫总会笑眯眯地向我敬礼,总会向我问好。于是我就回到了家。
路上的一切都在改变,无数的事物都在消逝于新生间徘徊。但是,这条路一直都在,对于前方的理想也一直存在着。
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