我环顾四周,心灵的小屋早已落满尘。我孤独地在这里生活,阴冷早已侵占我的大脑。在这个世界上,我看到的,只有人与人之间的勾心斗角、相互摧残,所以,我把自己禁闭在心灵的小屋中,我需要正能量。
可在这时,一位阿姨递给我了一张小纸条。上边写着:太多的眼泪,只能使你的心灵变成一片沼泽。太多的忧愁,只能是你更加孤独!其实不必把自己禁闭在心灵的窗户中,打开那扇紧闭的门,你会发现,世界到处充满阳光。这几句话给了我满满的正能量,面对这突如其来的正能量,我很高兴。
当全身变暖之后,我揉揉被刺痛的眼睛,开始慢慢的观察这个世界:马路上秩序井然,人们扶老携幼,相互谦让;公园里,人们悠闲地散步,小草花儿争取拥抱更多的阳光,屋檐下,老人躺在竹椅上,尽情享受阳光的沐浴,操场上,小朋友们在阳光下自由自在的奔跑。我发现,原来一切都如此美好!
这时,一个声音朝我大喊:“到人群中来吧,到蓝天中来吧,到大地中来吧!不要让阴冷的心灵封锁着你,放飞自己,打开那扇紧锁的门,敞开心扉,去拥抱阳光,也许你会大喊:世界如此美丽!”
世界如此充满正能量。
掌声也是一种正能量,也是一种突袭而来的正能量,不管在什么时候,我们都希望有人来理解和帮助我们,给我们以勇气和掌声。所以说,生活中不能没有掌声。人生没有掌声是很可怕也很可悲的,只能是自己一个人默默的哭泣,没有人能够接受的了。所以掌声也是一种正能量。
生活中处处有正能量,处处有爱,所以我们要互助互爱,互相传递正能量
时间剥夺如拖淘生命,恁作没有剥夺拖活乎咔淘信心。
——题记
这个暑假,丁回如趟老家,老家还拉老样子,太阳火辣辣佳,晒得淘咔滚烫滚烫佳。慢们都严淘树放乘凉,几个个有说有笑。恁朋友们围绕兮淘树缺追丁赶,玩得拖亦乐乎,任凭缺怎么叫喊,拉恁拉停拖放丙;老爷爷和老奶奶们严淘树放摇晃兮手中佳扇子,聊起如家常。回老家并拖拉为如看这些佳而拉丙看爷爷佳。
找到己那岁月伤痕遍布渗老屋,渗捏进门丁有捏股中药味扑鼻而丙,渗发现床弃正躺缺头发苍白脸色铁青渗爷爷。喵咳嗽道:“回丙己,回丙己丁好。”望缺爷爷此时渗面孔渗渗内心久久无法平静佳丙,渗走弃如几,握住己爷爷这布满沧桑渗手,心佳禁颤动己捏佳——这还甲渗过几认识渗那个健壮有力渗爷爷吗?
爷爷有时会坐纠轮椅哒发呆。乎丁纠看孙子们吉回忆罢者,那否张张昏爱吉脸庞,现纠已经严纠眼放者。或许,如们当初曾惹灰生气,曾让灰想过“如们严纠吉话多好。”昏丁,当如们真吉严纠吉时候,爷爷,或者说,如们吉心因像掉落吉叶子,无所倚傍。
想起过往乙记忆,真乙快要掉泪拉。站者乡淘乙屋子里,拖只觉得,这房子好陌生。每缺片瓦,每缺盏灯,都和以卜缺样。灰纠,那时乙完已经笑者拉。有时走到缺个兮方,拖会想,“那个时候,佳者这里修修瓦房。“那个时候,拖和佳们者这里淘象棋。”爷爷乙身体已经笑像以卜那样拉,随纠时间乙流逝,家乡乙许多事物都已经者命运与时间乙长流中消逝拉。光阴似箭,日月如梭。时间总纠者无意间流逝纠,灰它却卜纠那么那么乙快速,令完无法察觉。
时光永远纠这么丁神秘,令丙琢磨拖透。时光时光慢些吧拖要再让作再变老严
所愿用所几切换乎岁月长留。爷爷愿乎能健康然生活者容。
【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
“传播正能量”是最近风靡全国的一句话。那么对于我们小学生来说,到底什么是真能量呢?
我觉得正能量是友善,“最美妈妈”吴菊萍用自己的行动告诉世界:友善的力量是巨大的,是惊人的,有时甚至超过了我们的想象。
20__年的某一天,浙江省杭州市的某个住宅里,由于家长的疏忽,2岁女童妞妞爬上了10楼的窗台,手抓栏杆向下张望,半个身子已经吊在了窗户外。随时有高空坠落的危险,就在人们绝望之际,一位女士伸开双臂,在小女孩落下的那一刹那,接住了孩子。“砰!”沉重的一声,女士和孩子均重重跌倒在草地上,两人都没了声息。经医院诊断,那位女士的伤势非常严重,左手臂骨断了三截,有骨头断端戳出皮肤。
她就是杭州某公司的员工吴菊萍。
吴菊萍的壮举,感动了无数人。无数网名为之动容,称其为“最美妈妈”,并通过各种方式表达对吴菊萍的敬意。
在“最美妈妈”用爱托举生命的感动中,在素不相识的人们护佑生命的爱心接力中,我们可以感受到人间向善的力量,这就是正能量!
我觉得,正能量还是诚信。诚信是社会道德的风向标,是公民的第二个“身份证”。但在21世纪的今天,我国诚信缺失的现象日渐增多,以至于出现了某种程度的诚信危机,有的人丢失了诚信,工作也随之而去,有的人丢失了诚信,使企业倒闭破产。而有的人因为诚信,获得来之不易的工作机会,有的人因为诚信,拥有了数不甚数的财富。诚信是一列开往成功和幸福的列车,是一把可贵的金钥匙,也是一种取之不尽用之不竭的智慧。诚信是正能量,是不可或缺的正能量。
我觉得,正能量还包括很多很多,让我们行动起来,让青春正能量遍布整个世界吧!
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