读同学们的作文,感受最深的是两种情况:一种是“落花流水春去也”,我自飘零水自流,就事论事,空洞议论;一种是“为赋新词强说愁”,情感泛滥,抒情无着。
如果写的人心中没有炽热的感情,却想在作品中表现出什么打动人心的情感,这种可能是是极小的,要想感动别人,就首先要感动自己。但是,就算已经感动了自己,也不见得就能感动别人。这里面就有方法的问题,写作的手法显得尤为重要。
不是少年无情愁,为赋新词强说愁,而是愁在心里人自知,他人何处觅秋风。别人感受不到,那是因为写的人没有很好的表达,无关乎愁深愁浅。
有一首歌这样唱:最近有点烦,有点烦,有点烦。烦确实是烦了,主要是听的人烦了,一句话反复说,不烦才怪。但是,烦的意境有没有出来?没有。也许心绪是有了,感染力却没有,无法给人身临其境的触动。如果连音乐的曲调也没有了,那简直就成了噪音。
这种抒情法是最糟糕的,直抒情意,简单粗暴。写作是表情达意的艺术,不仅要把意思表达清楚明白,还要表达得体有情味,这样的作品才有可读性,才能在考场上拿高分。
“微凉的秋风卷起散落一地的枯叶,然后撒手而去,任凭枯叶化作一只只残蝶,而后绝望地坠。枝头那颤抖的枯叶,终是敌不过风的诱惑,挣脱开母亲的手投向了大地的怀抱。离开了的,终是回不去了吧…… ”这是同学的习作。文字有了情境,给人以画面感,笔端流露出情绪。作者虽然没有直接去抒情,却是有意地表现情意,加上最后一句“离开的了,终是回不去了吧”,便可引出下文的.回忆。
有景有情,有画面,有情境,借情抒情,不得不说,这种抒情法又上升了一个层次。
但是,如果细品,还是会感觉这样的景是被心绪扭曲了的景,并非自然,甚至因为扭曲过分而显出了虚假的成分。
最高级的抒情,是将景和情融为一体,不偏不倚,景中有情,情中有景。秦少游有一首《减字木兰花》:欲见回肠,断尽金炉小篆香。“回肠”是作者内心千回百转的感情,当然是看不见的。但是,作者又要让读者看见,怎么办?他就说了,你想看见我千回百转的感情,就去看看那个金炉中断尽的小篆香。香燃尽了,灰烬掉下来,就像是一个个小篆字一样,柔糜,缠绵,根本分不清谁是谁。
在这句词中,回肠就是小篆香,小篆香就是回肠,也就是物即情,情即物,情物一体。作者秦少游不是将自己的情感投射到燃尽的香灰上,而是将情感融入到其中,给人以丰富的联想和体验。
这是将情比物,还有将物比情的:自在飞花轻似梦,无边丝雨细如愁。如果说将情比物是为了让情感更直观地表现,那么,将物比情就是直接赋予物以人的情感了,飞花轻似梦,便是物我相融,这里的“我”也就不再是一个独立的我,而是一个能与宇宙自然融而为一的无处不在的“我”。
情不再是人的情,也是物的情,情不再是“我”的情,也是你的情,他的情,这样的抒情也就让情感更具有包容性,共情性,也就更能打动读者。
对于有心之人来说,柴米油盐酱醋茶里皆有深情;对于会表达的人来说,信手拈来,便是情感汪洋,可以漫漶整个世界。
The fox, filled with arrogance, examined the cat from head to feet, and for a long time did not know whether he should give an answer. At last he said, "Oh, you poor beard-licker, you speckled fool, you hungry mouse hunter, what are you thinking? Have you the nerve to ask how I am doing? What do you know? How many tricks do you understand?"
"I understand but one," answered the cat, modestly.
"What kind of a trick is it?" asked the fox.
"When the dogs are chasing me, I can jump into a tree and save myself."
"Is that all?" said the fox. "I am master of a hundred tricks, and in addition to that I have a sackful of cunning. I feel sorry for you. Come with me, and I will teach you how one escapes from the dogs."
Just then a hunter came by with four dogs. The cat jumped nimbly up a tree, and sat down at its top, where the branches and foliage completely hid her.
"Untie your sack, Mr. Fox, untie your sack," the cat shouted to him, but the dogs had already seized him, and were holding him fast.
"Oh, Mr. Fox," shouted the cat. "You and your hundred tricks are left in the lurch. If you been able to climb like I can, you would not have lost your life."
一只猫在森林里遇到一只狐狸,心想:“他又聪明,又丰富,挺受人尊重的。”於是它很友好地和狐狸打招呼:“日安,尊敬的狐狸先生,您好吗?这些日子挺艰难的,您过得怎么样?”
狐狸傲慢地将猫从头到脚地打量了一番,半天拿不定主意是不是该和它说话。最后它说:“哦,你这个倒霉的长着鬍子、满身花纹的傻瓜、饥肠辘辘地追赶老鼠的.傢伙,你会啥?有甚么资格问我过得怎么样?你都学了点甚么本事?”
“我只有一种本领。”猫谦虚地说。
“甚么本领?”狐狸问。
“有人追我的时候,我会爬到树上去藏起来保护自己。”
“就这本事?”狐狸不屑地说,“我掌握了上百种本领,而且还有满口袋计谋。我真觉得你可怜,跟着我吧,我教你怎么从追捕中逃生。”
就在这时,猎人带着四条狗走近了。猫敏捷地窜到一棵树上,在树顶上蹲伏下来,茂密的树叶把它遮挡得严严实实。
“快打开你的计谋口袋,狐狸先生,快打开呀!”猫冲着狐狸喊道。可是猎狗已经将狐狸扑倒咬住了。“哎呀,狐狸先生,”猫喊道,“你的千百种本领就这么给扔掉了!假如你能像我一样爬树就不至於丢了性命了!”
Country Garden and Me
On the way from Panyu City to Shunde City and approaching the conjunction point of both cities, a big advertisement board of the infamous Country Garden will catch your eyes. And on the board, a lovely girl gently holds a little white pigeon.
She looks at everybody with a sweet smile. Who is this girl? Let me tell you later. Country Garden is located at the Beijao town, Shunde City of Guangdong Province. Ten years ago when my Dad and Mom took me as a baby to Guangzhou, it was a wasteland here. But what does this piece of wasteland look like nowadays? Country Garden has been developed and enlarged rapidly on the ground of this land, and a great number of high-quality houses and apartments have been built up within the garden. Over the past decade, other nine country gardens with various unique designs have been erasing around the great city of Guangzhou. The construction and management of several gardens have engaged the devoted contributions from my Dad and Mom.
Country Garden has grown up together with me, and I am one of the witnesses of its growth and development.
1。thereof
以”there”为前缀加上介词构成的词,如thereafter, thereby, therein, thereinafter, thereinbefore, thereon, thereof, thereunder, thereupon, therewith等,在文中具体指什么,需要读者依照合同的上下文来判断,因而理解起来比较复杂,请看下例:
This Agreement is written in the English language。 In case of any discrepancy between the English version and any translation thereof, the English text shall govern。 句中”the English version and any translation thereof”从上下文判断意为 “the English version and any translation of the English version”,即thereof一词代替of the English version。与以here开头的词如hereof的理解方法类似。
2。therein
该词意为in that, in that particular
context, in that respect,“在那里”,“在那点上”,“在那方面”,表示上文已提及的“合同中的”“工程中的”。如:the contract or any part thereof意为the contract or any part of the contract,合同或合同的任何部分。
3。thereto
该词意为:to that,“随附”,“附之”,如:“Contract Products” means the products specified in Appendix 2 to this Contract, together with all improvements and modifications thereof or developments with respect thereto。 句中or developments with respect thereto 意为:or developments with respect to the developments。
4。thereunder
该词意为:under that, “在其下”,“依照”,如:The Borrower fails to pay any amount payable thereunder as and when such amount shall become payable。 句中any amount payable thereunder意为any amount payable under the contract。
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(2)跑
(3)率领(或“带领”)
(4)适逢,正赶上
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(2)(他)常常独自在庭院(台阶)散步,说:“古人难道在欺骗我吗(或古人怎么能欺骗我呢)?”(关键词:恒步岂和省略句每一点0.5分)
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