初稿
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money -it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
自评
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分:23
互评(刘兴顺评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
评分:23
互评(战越评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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互评(李春霞评)
As is shown above, a leader father is sitting in the chair with a seal grasping in the hand, and a lot of money beside him. He seriously said to his son that there is more to life than just money it is power. Simple as the picture is, but a profound truth is reveled in the picture.
I surely disagree with father ’s philosophy. As a leader, he shouldn ’t use his power to make money. It is his duty to serve people wholeheartedly, just one person said “with great power comes great responsibility ”. If he stick to his philosophy. I believe that he will spend the rest of his life in prison. What’s worse, he could affect his son ’s philosophy, guiding him in the opposite direction , nothing can be done to reverse the trend itself. The only solution is to change father ’s philosophy. Because of many greedy officials in China, it is time to reverse the trend itself by establishing new policy. As Chinese always has been our confidence that we can change for the better and better.
In my opinion, there is more to life than just money -it is happiness, nothing is important than happiness. We can live a colorful life in our spare time.
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秋姑娘飘过山岭,飘过大地,飘过美丽的校园。山林郁郁葱葱,一片片绿叶像一颗颗玛瑙一样青翠欲滴,大地身体薄,把绿得发亮的树木换上了金灿灿的新装,几片顽皮的树叶迫不及待地翩翩起舞。美丽的校园美不胜收,从远处飘来阵阵清香,有清新的枫叶、清甜的桂林和永不言败的雪松味。
当然这三种,是我最喜爱的叶子。
枫叶的形状酷似五指分开的叶手,摸起来软软的,边缘还有一些不刺手锯齿,中间镶着黄绿色,像手指中间挂着一颗颗夺人眼球的宝石,我小心翼翼地将它放在脸上,冰凉冰凉的,舒服极了,放眼望去像一团团熊熊燃烧的火焰。
桂叶的.形状像一个橄榄球一样,轻轻的放在胸前,一阵微风飘来,浓郁的桂花香直往鼻孔里钻,而且,还带有一丝丝甜甜的桂汁。
雪松,它是与众不同的,它的叶子像针一样细细的,长长的,如果在大雪纷飞时行走,会感到一根根针像刀割一样让人不寒而栗,但它有一个特权,可以在鹅毛大雪之际为小草挡住大雪,不让小草压倒,它也不会向困难低头,它一年四季青翠,可谓是终年不败。
我爱秋天,更爱秋天美丽的树叶,因为它们可以引起我无限的遐想。
我是一只高飞的大雁,我最喜欢的季节是秋天,它不像春天那样花枝招展;不像夏天那样烈日炎炎;也不像冬天那样寒风凛冽。秋天的云会让你潇洒,秋天的风带给你浪漫,秋天的果送给你甘甜,秋天的你会充满喜悦。
在这秋高气爽,天高云淡的季节里,我会跟随着雁群南飞过冬,我们在蔚蓝色的天空中,欢快地拍打着翅膀,一会儿排成“人”字形,一会儿排成“一”字形,我们飞过山林,果园,田野……
秋天的山林,层林尽染,一片金色,好像阳光永远洒落在树林一个角落,树上的绿叶渐渐变得金黄,尤其是那枫叶,火红火红的,一阵清凉的秋风吹来,树上的叶子蜷曲着身躯,缓缓的飘落下来,随风舞动。大地披上了一层金黄色的衣裳,大雁们告诉大地,秋天来了!秋天来了!
雁群离开了山林,飞到了果园。秋天的果实,硕果累累,万里飘香。沉甸甸的果实都争先恐后的钻了出来,露出了五彩的笑脸,洋洋得意的高挂枝头,把大树都压弯了腰,一群美丽的姑娘们背着背篓采摘着丰收的喜悦。姑娘们的银铃般的笑声,传遍了整个果园。大雁们告诉姑娘,秋天来了!秋天来了!
雁群又飞到田野,田野里的谷子成熟了,田野里的谷子都成熟了,秋风吹过田野,麦杆向大雁点点头,麦田似金黄色的大海,麦浪犹如海浪一般,上下翻滚,田间的农民伯伯笑的眼睛眯成了一条缝,雁群告诉农民伯伯:秋天来了,秋天来了!
秋天像个仙女一样,穿着火红的裙子向我们飘来;秋天像健壮的小伙子,带着成功的喜悦向我走来,秋天不但是丰收的季节,而且还是积累成果、迎接着冬天的挑战的季节。我爱秋天,爱她的火热,爱她的丰硕,爱她的成熟。
炎热的夏天过去了,凉爽的秋天来临了。秋天的天特别蓝,好像是画出来的。秋天的空气特别新鲜,好像被过滤过一样。早上,我走在上学的路上,吸一口空气,特别清爽,头脑也清醒万分。
秋天的田野那就更不用说了。稻田一片金黄,远看像铺了一层金黄的地毯。你看那火红的高粱,远看就像一群戴红帽子的小姑娘,随着一阵阵微风在那里翩翩起舞。你再看那柿子,火红火红的,像一个个红通通的灯笼
虽然秋天的花木大多枯萎了,但是只要你细心地去找,就会发现那美丽的秋菊,五颜六色,千姿百态。走近一闻,一股股清香迎面而来……这些秋菊争奇斗艳,在凉爽的秋风中竞相开放。
啊!秋天真美,我爱秋天!
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