小升初作文例析【一】
春天到了，万物复苏;春天到了，耕耘播种。小草萌发了，野花开放了，春的景象多美呀!带给大自然无数新的生命。
草，是多么的顽强，它经住了多少风吹雨打，仍旧坚强的生长着，因为它找到了生命的根本。只有这样，它才能为人类多净化空气，原来春天的小草是那么美好，它给予人们的多，留给自己的少。我要学习小草那助人为乐的精神，还有它顽强不屈的品质。
野花也像小草一样找到了生命的根本，它虽然没有玫瑰花那么艳丽，也没有百和花那么清淡，还没有油菜花的团队精神，可是它也算是为人类尽全力了，它点缀了世界，也点缀了我们的生活。我知道，自己虽然还小，但是长大后一定不能忘记大家对我的期望，要尽自己最大的能力努力学习，做一个有用的人。
公园里，各种奇花异草竞相开放、争奇斗艳，无论美丑都对自己充满信心。对自己有信心，才会活得开心，生活的美好。
我感受着春的气息，发现春的奥秘，原来春天永远是这样奇妙美丽、生机勃勃。啊!我爱你，春天。
小升初作文例析【二】
风霜雪雨不是孤立地存在的。它们与其它自然现象是紧密相连、互相依存的。如我们平常说"山风呼啸"、"林海雪原"，就关系到山野与森林。因此，我们在观察和描写风霜雪雨的时候，一定要注意观察和描写周围有关的景物，作为风霜雪雨的衬托。这样，内容才会有声有色，丰富多彩。请看下列例段：雨，轻轻地洒落在校园里，它就像一位美丽的少女，披上轻轻的白纱，飘着、飘着。那小小的花朵，被雨滋润后，片片花瓣像那片片泛舟，轻盈地在水中漂浮。校园里苍老的榕树那细长的枝条，被雨淋湿了，非常青翠，焕发了青春。椰子树宽大的叶子，被雨冲刷得洁净翠绿，雨滴从叶片上滑了下来，奏出"嘀嘀嗒嗒"的轻音乐。
雪渐渐停了，太阳公公从东方露出了笑脸，金色的阳光映着白茫茫的雪地，照得人睁不开眼睛。银光耀眼的大地和万物融为一体，变成了粉妆玉砌的世界。一阵风吹来，玉屑似的雪末儿随风飘扬，在清晨的阳光下，变换着各种颜色。
寒风像一把刀子刮着人的脸。我抬头望去，咦，屋顶披上了一层白白的霜。手被冻得通红，手指也变得僵直，脚被冻得发麻，太阳的脸也变成了苍白色。
上述三段，写了雨，写了雪，写了风。但各段都注意了对背景的描写。如例段一是写雨，却详细描写了校园树木花草的美丽景色，衬托雨水给大自然带来了生机和欢乐；例段二写的是雪景。但对太阳和风进行了重点描写，衬托出阳光照射下"粉妆玉砌世界"的迷人景色；例段三写寒风，却写了人，写了霜，写了太阳，衬托寒风给人与自然带来的不适。
小升初作文例析【三】
【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1．学生给老师打分已很普遍；
2．人们对其持不同态度（肯定或否定的态度）；
3．你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然，此任务是写一篇议论文，主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论，开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况，从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活，但有一定的语言难度，也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作，也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下，也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙，写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时，也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思，学会换位思考，这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确，赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师，就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样，不仅对学生、学校有利，而且对老师本人也有利。这样，老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己，看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可，这将是对自己的一次鼓励，为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高，老师就应进行反思，调控教学方法和教学态度。这样，教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据，内容充实，贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用，是短文结构清晰，层次分明。最后，最值得一提的是，文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式，给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述，这是一篇不可多得的佳作，值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下：
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ；Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象，然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响，最后提出解决问题的办法，或者得出结论，或者提出个人看法，或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张，论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据；论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说，议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多，但最常用的是因果分析法。即：分析事实与论点的因果关系，指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点，从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中，议论文的比重占得越来越多，议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样，有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型，但文体实际是议论文，而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是：
1. 观点鲜明，文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明，一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持，不同层次之间要分明，过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文，得出一个符合逻辑的结论，突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力，一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间，上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作，请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文，列举吸烟的危害，并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来，越来越多的中学生出国学习，出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息，谈谈自己的看法。
1）良好的语言环境，更利于语言学习。
2）拓宽视野，学习国外先进的科学技术。
3）传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇：媒介，中间人：mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study．Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad．First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods．Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展，道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解，谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
小升初作文例析【四】
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首先，我衷心感谢您能在百忙之中浏览我的自荐信，您犹如一把金钥匙，为我开起了代表希望的大门。
我叫xxx，是一个即将面临小升初的6年级小学生;是一个活泼开朗的女孩。我出生于20xx年10月26日，现在已经11岁了。我对贵校向往已久，望贵校能接纳我成为其中一名学生，在此开始一段融洽美好的中学之旅。我怀着一颗赤诚的心与对贵校的憧憬，向您真诚地推荐自己。
在日常生活中，无论什么时候，我都热爱学习。在学校里，我能与大家融洽相处，待人诚恳，互相关心同学，是一位在德智体美劳上都能获得优秀成绩的学生;在家里，我能帮父母做一些力所能及的家务事，帮父母分忧。而现在，经过不断地磨练，我已经具有适当的独立生活的能力了。
在每个学期里，我都能获得“三好学生”、“文明礼貌使者”的荣誉奖状，在20xx学年下学期，我获得了五年级“语文能力竞赛二等奖”与“数学能力竞赛三等奖”并且获得了“英语学科能力竞赛三等奖”;在20xx学年第一学期“六年级数学知识竞赛”中，我荣获“二等奖”、“英语知识竞赛”获得三等奖、在20xx年暑假，我参加了“阳光喔议论与抒情”的课程学习，表现优异，从而被评为一等奖;在20xx学年上学期，我参加了京溪小学校园科技节“科学幻想画”创作比赛中，我的作品“太空游乐场”荣获三等奖;同时，我也在同一时间参加了“科学小论文“创作比赛中，荣获二等奖。
在课余时间里，我喜欢阅读各类书籍，如花朵一般在泥土里汲取营养，课外读物让我开阔了视野，更新了观念。对我影响特别大的就是著名作家沈石溪的动物小说。文章已深沉的笔触，通过对动物社会的描写，揭示了动物丰富的内心世界，使读者能从其中引发联想：连动物都懂得道理，可我们人呢?我喜欢绘画，特别爱好画〈〈知音漫客〉〉、〈〈中国卡通〉〉里面的女孩子，如萝铃、茉莉等，我觉得美好的生活需要会绘画来点缀，绘画让我在学习以外增添了乐趣，我也希望小升初考试结束后，我要进行系统的专业学习，以便提高我的水平。最近，我特别重视体育运动，因此，我每天都会进行适量的有氧运动。
良禽择木而栖，士为知已者而搏。华师附中是一个历史悠久的中学，并且治学有序、管理有方，是我梦寐以求的学习圣地。若我是一只羽翼尚未丰满的雏鹰，贵校就是一片我十分向往的蓝天，我相信，在这蔚蓝天空中，终有一日，我一定会成为翱翔九天的雄鹰! 再次感谢您为我留出时间，来阅读我的自荐书，祝您工作顺心!
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小升初作文例析【五】
风霜雪雨随不同时间、不同季节、不同地域而变化，如春风和秋风不同，南风和北风有异，细雨和暴雨各有千秋。因此，我们在观察和描写风霜雪雨时，就要注意抓住其特征。如下面例段：
不知什么时候，落起了春雨，雨像绢丝一般，又轻又细，听不见渐渐的声响，也感不到雨浇的淋漓。只觉得好像这是一种湿漉漉的烟雾，没有形状，也不出响声，轻柔地滋润着大地和人心。
刚才还是碧空万里，烈日当空。突然，地面刮起大风，乌云立即布满了天空．雨点嘀嘀嗒嗒地下起来了。开始是几滴，很快地，雨点成串地落了下来，整个天地白茫茫的，远处的山峦，甚至不太远的树丛、屋宇都看不见了。豆大的雨点落到河里，溅起无数个涟漪。急雨打进窗纱，敲击着玻璃，从窗隙中溅进窗台，流到屋里的地面上。刚才的燥热、烦闷，都被这大风急雨冲散了。
上面两个例段都是写雨。例段一写的是春雨，作者抓住春雨"润物细无声"的特点描绘，给人以温柔亲切之感；例段二写的是一场急雨，按照"雨前"、"雨中"、"雨后"的顺序进行描绘，写出了急风骤雨的特点。
旋风把黄沙抛到天上，像千万条黄龙在天上翻滚。黄风过去，红风又来，满天像烧着大火。一股黑风盖到头顶上，迅速向四面扩展，天又黑了下来，黑得伸手不见五指。
风卷着雪花，狂暴地扫荡着山野、村庄，摇撼着古树的躯干，撞开了人家的门窗，把破屋子上的茅草，大把大把地撕下来向空中扬去，把冷森森的雪花，撒进人家的屋子里，并且在光秃秃的树梢上，怪声地怒吼着、咆哮着……
上面两段都是写风的猛烈与狂暴。但各有其特点。例段一，主要抓住风的形状（像……黄龙……像大火……）和颜色（黄、红、黑）的特点进行描绘；例段二，则着重描写风的动态，恰当地运用了"卷、扫荡、摇撼、撞、撕、扬、撒、怒吼、咆哮"等9个动词，把风的撒野与狂暴，描写得生动形象极了。
大雪整整下了一夜。第二天早晨，天放晴了。推开门一看，嗬！好大的雪啊！那山川、河流、树木、房屋，都笼罩上了一层白茫茫的厚雪。极目远眺，万里江山变成了一个粉妆玉砌的世界。看近处，那些落光了叶子的树木上，挂满了毛茸茸亮晶晶的银条儿，那些冬夏常青的松树和柏树上，挂满了蓬松松沉甸甸的雪球儿。一阵风吹来，树木轻轻地摇晃着，那美丽的银条儿和雪球儿就簌簌落落地抖落下来。玉屑似的雪末儿随风飘扬，在清晨的阳光下，幻映出一道道五光十色的彩虹。
江南的雪，可是滋润美艳之极了：……雪野中有红的珠宝山茶，白中隐青的单瓣梅花，深黄的馨香的腊梅花；雪下面还有冷绿的杂草。蝴蝶确乎没有；蜜蜂是否来采山茶花和腊梅的蜜，我可记不真切了。但我的眼前仿佛看见冬花开在雪野中，有许多蜜蜂忙碌地飞着，也听得它们嗡嗡地闹着。
上述两例同样是写雪景，由于地域不同，雪景的.特色就大不一样。例段一，描写的是一个"粉妆玉砌的世界"--典型的北国风光；例二则是一幅"滋润美艳"的江南雪景--有与雪相映的山茶、梅花和冷绿的杂草，甚至还仿佛有蜜蜂"嗡嗡地闹着"。真是别有一番情趣。
