在学校的这些日子里,我常常会想起家里的那串紫色的风铃……
生1:别具一格,能引起悬念。
生2:既然是写人的,应点明“风铃”与所写之人的关系。
师:同学们的分析都很好,抓住了问题的关键。写人记叙文的开头通常要点明时间、地点、人物三要素,有时留点悬念固然好,但要在其后适当的地方交代清楚,不要让其成为“悬案”。下面请大家总结一下,写人记叙文究竟怎样才能开好头,最好结合观点举点更有代表性的范例。
生1:开门见山,点明题旨。
生2:一般要写明时间、地点、人物,最好能给故事的叙述打下伏笔,设置悬念。
生3:要能渲染一种气氛,把人物放到特定的故事背景之中。
生4:要能落笔生情,以情动人。臧克家的《老哥哥》一文的开头就是这样:“秋是怀人的季候。深宵里,床头上叫着蟋蟀,凉风吹一缕月光穿过纸窗来。在我没法合紧双眼的当儿,一个老态龙钟的老人影像便朦胧在我眼前了。”
师:大家谈得好极了。刚才这位同学举的例子给大家的小结提供了一个典型的证明:特定的季候、具体的时间、特定的环境气氛、特定的形象,怀念之情渗透其中。我送大家四个字作为对开头要求的概括,那就是(板书):明题激欲。明题就是揭示主旨,写谁,写什么;“激欲”就是通过环境气氛的'渲染、情绪的感染,乃至悬念的设置,激发读者强烈的阅读。关于写人记叙文开头的写法我们暂且讨论到这里,请大家接着评析主体部分。
练习一
1.Wedoourhomeworkeveryevening.(改为否定句)
We_________________ourhomeworkeveryevening.对划线部分提问
________________dotheyhaveaclassmeeting?
3.Shecouldhardlyunderstandthispassage.(改为反意疑问句
Shecouldhardlyunderstandthispassage,___________________?
4.Themanagertoldhimhowtogetusefulinformation.(改为否定句
Themanager__________________himhowtogetusefulinformation.
5.Tom’ssistercanspeakEnglishandJapaneseverywell.(改为反意疑问句
Tom’ssistercanspeakEnglishandJapaneseverywell,__________________?
对划线部分提问
__________________helivetwentyyearsago?
7.Samdoessomecleaninginthemorning.(改为否定句
Sam_________do_________cleaninginthemorning.
对划线部分提问
__________________havethestudentsworkedonthesurvey?
9.Yourfatherusedtorideabike.(改成反意问句)
Yourfatherusedtorideabike,_______________?(对划线提问)
_____________________thepopulationofGermany?
11.Mr.Wangwasheshiscaronceamonth.(改为一般疑问句)
Mr.Wang(对划线部分提问
willSusancomebackfromAthens?
13.MyfriendslosttheirwaywhentheyweretravelinginHongKong.(改为一般疑问句
________yourfriends________theirwaywhentheyweretravelinginHongKong?
14.对划线部分提问
________________hasYaoMingbeenintheRocketTeam?
15.Sheputthedigitalcameraonthebedjustnow.(改为否定句
She__________________thedigitalcameraonthebedjustnow.
16.Mark'sflowntoHainanIslandforwinterholidays.(改为反意疑问句
Mark'sflowntoHainanIslandforwinterholidays,__________________?
(专辑.(划线部分提问
_________didSuperGirlZhouBichang_________toVienna?
18.I’vealreadysavedenoughmoneytobuyanewcar.(改为否定句
I________savedenoughmoneytobuyacar________.
19.Lilyusedtohavelongstraighthair.(改为反意疑问句
Lilyusedtohavelongstraighthair,________________?
20.Hehasalreadybeenthere.(改为一般疑问句
__________hebeenthere__________?
21.Theydecidedthattheywouldn'thavethepicnicbecauseofthebadweather.(改为简单句
Theydecided___________________havethepicnicbecauseofthebad
weather.
22.TheEnglishpeoplehardlyevershakehandsbetweenthestrangers.(改为反意疑问句
TheEnglishpeoplehardlyevershakehandsbetweenthestrangers,____________________?
23.Theygrewsomesunflowersintheirgardenlastyear.(改为否定句)
They____________________anysunflowersintheirgardenlastyear.
24.Janedrinksmilkeverymorning.(改为一般疑问句)
_________Jane___________milkeverymorning?(就划线部分提问)
___________map___________toClass4?
26.Youcanchooseonlyoneofthetwo:amini-TVoraDVDplayer.(改为选择疑问句
youwantamini-TVaDVDplayer?
27.Thatdetectivefilmissoamazing.(改为感叹句)
______________________amazingdetectivefilm!
28.Hehassomemoneyleft.(改成否定句)
Hemoneyleft.
29.(划线部分提问)
dothemembersofthefilmsocietymeet?
30.Hismotherknewwhythelittleboywasunhappyallday.(改为一般疑问句
_______hismother_______whytheboywasunhappyallday?
31.Helooksveryfunnywiththathaton.(改为感叹句
______________helookswiththathaton!.对划线部分提问
______________theybuildthisfactory?
33.Ihavealreadyfinishedthetestpaper.(改为否定句)
I________finishedthetestpaper________.
34.Johnsondeniedcheatinginthecompetition.(改为反意疑问句)
Johnsondeniedcheatinginthecompetition,________________?(对划线部分提问)________________thestoryneedtobefunny?
36.Samdoessomecleaninginthemorning.(改为否定句
Sam_________do_________cleaninginthemorning.
对划线部分提问__________________havethestudentsworkedonthesurvey?
38.(对划线部分提问)__________________hashebeenatopfashiondesigner?
39.对划线部分提问
________________willtheymoveintothenewschool?
40.togotothePeople’sSquarebyunderground.(对划线部分提问
_______________didittakeyoutogotothePeople’sSquarebyunderground?
练习二:
1.Goldislessvaluablethandiamond.(保持句意不变
Goldis________________valuableasdiamond.
2.HetoldthechildrentogoandwatchhistankofGhostfish.(改为被动语态Thechildren________________togoandwatchhistankofGhostfish.
3.UnlessIhaveaquietroom,Icannotdoanywork.(保持句意不变)
Icannotdoanywork________I_________haveaquietroom.
4.Themanagerarrivedhereafewminutesago.(保持句意不变)
Themanagerhas_________here________afewminutes.
5.TheywillsendhimtoworkinJapanforoneyear.(改为被动语态
Hewill_________________toworkinJapanforoneyear.
6.Thewordsonthenoticeboardareverysmall.Ican’tseethemclearly.(保持句子原意
ThewordsonthenoticeboardaresmallIcan’tseethem
clearly.
7.Wecansolvetheproblemswiththehelpoftheteacher.(改为被动语态Theproblemscan__________________withthehelpoftheteacher.
8.Wecan’tfinishtheworkinsuchashorttime.(保持原句意思
It’s__________________ustofinishtheworkinsuchashorttime.
9.Wemustkeepthenoiseunder50dbs.(分贝(改成被动语态)
Thenoisemust_______________under50dbshere.
10.Mikedoesn’tlikeclassicalmusic.Billydoesn’teither.(合并成一句)_________MikenorBilly__________classicalmusic.
11.Theroomissodirtythatwecan’tliveinit.(保持句意不变)
Theroomisn’t___________________forustolivein.
12.Nooneknowswhenwewillstarttomorrow.(保持原句意思)
Nooneknowsstarttomorrow.
13.TheSmithswillinvitetheprofessortotakepartintheparty.(改成被动语态totakepartinthepartybytheSmiths.
14.Ifyouarenotbrave,you’llloseyourlastchance.(保持原句意思)
youare’llloseyourlastchance.
15.Theystoremuchinformationinthecomputer.(改成被动语态
Muchinformation________________inthecomputer.
16.Don’tthrowrubbishhereandthere.Ourteachersaidtous.(合并为一句
Ourteachertoldus________________throwrubbishhereandthere.
17.IfJohndoesn’tapologizeforwhathedid,Iwilltelltheteacherabouthisbadbehavior.(保持原句意思)
_______John_______forwhathedid,Iwilltelltheteacherabouthisbadbehavior.
18.Idon'tknowwherewecangrowvegetablesinthecity.(改为简单句Idon'tknow__________________growvegetablesinthecity.
19.PeopleusedtoenjoythemselveschattingonMSNwhenitworkedwell.(保持句意基本不变
Peopleusedto_________alotof_________chattingonMSNwhenitworkedwell.
20.Ifyoudon’timproveyourhandwriting,youwilllosemarksintheexam.(合成同义句
Youwilllosemarksintheexam________you________yourhandwriting.
21.Togofishingisfun.(句意不变)
_____isfun___________fishing.
22.Dickwassoshortthathecouldn’ttouchthetopofthebookshelf.(保持句意基本不变)
Dickwasn’t____________________toreachthetopofthebookshelf.
23.“CanIborrowyourbikeforawhileornot?”(保持句意基本不变)
Tomaskedhissister__________he__________borrowherbikeornotforawhile.
24.Thecouplecouldn’tdecidewhichflattheyshouldchooseatfirst.(保持原句意思)
Thecouplecouldn’tdecidewhichflatatfirst.
25.Meaninglessinformationisdifficultforthelittleboytoremember.(保持原句意思)
isdifficultforthelittleboyremembermeaninglessinformation.
26.Peoplethrowawaymillionsofplasticbagsinourcityeveryday.(改成被动语态)
Millionsofplasticbagsawayinourcity.
27.Shewassocarelessthatshecouldn’tfindthemistakesinhertestpaper.(保持句意基本不变
Shewas______________tofindthemistakesinhertestpaper.
28.WewillholdthenextOlympicGamesinBeijingin2008.(改为被动语态)
ThenextOlympicGameswill______________inBeijingin2008.
29.Theelderlymanpushedthebirdsintotheriver.(改为被动语态)
Thebirds________________intotheriverbytheelderlyman.
30.Dolphinsaresocleverthattheycanfollowtheinstructions.(保持句意基本不变)Dolphinsare________________tofollowtheinstructions.
31.Wecan’tfinishtheworkinsuchashorttime.(保持原句意思
It’s__________________ustofinishtheworkinsuchashorttime.
32.TheyinvitedtheastronautandhiswifetothepartyonChristmasEve.(改为被动语态
Theastronautandhiswife__________________tothepartyonChristmasEve.
33.Thelittlegirldidn’tgotobedunlessthegrandmothertoldherastory.(保持句意基本不变
Thelittlegirldidn’tgotobed_________thegrandmother_________tellherastory.
34.Theplaneissobigthatitcancarry300passengersatonetime.(改为简单句)
Theplaneisbig__________________carry300passengersatonetime.
35.Didtheyknowtheanswertothequestion?Ididn’tknow…(合并为一句Ididn’tknow________theyhad________theanswertothequestion.
一、举例子:具体真切地说明了事物的××特点。二、分类别:条理清楚地说明了事物的××特点。
三、打比方:形象生动地说明该事物的××特点,增强了文章的趣味性。
四、列数字:具体而准确地说明该事物的××特点。
五、作比较:突出强调了被说明对象的××特点(地位、影响等)。
六、下定义:简明周密地揭示了说明对象的本质和内涵,使说明更严密。
七、列图表:直观形象地说明了事物的××特点。
八、引言论:用引用的方法说明事物的特征,增强说服力,如引用古诗文、谚语、俗话。
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