看着蜗牛在阳台上缓缓爬过,我的视线就被它吸引住了。
不是因为讨厌它,而是对它身后一条长长的“线”产生了兴趣。我不清楚小小的蜗牛要到哪里去,但它分泌的黏液却告诉我它曾经到过这里,这是它留下的痕迹。
我在学习的道路上缓缓地前进着,我知道前方的困难会随处可见,我知道讨厌的绊脚石会越来越多,但是我拥有一分坚定的信念:冲破困难的牢笼,不到终点绝不停止!我要将我的脚印留在探究的路上。
蜗牛已经爬过了阳台,它正在向屋顶出发,缓慢的它更加慢了,小心翼翼地,勇敢地向上爬,它身后的痕迹依旧存在,让人联想到了它前进的艰辛。我很想帮它一把,刚想伸出手却又不自由主地停住了,脑中蹦出一个想法:不曾体味过程的艰辛,胜利的终点对它又有什么意义呢?
我沉浸在一片茫茫的题海中,想空闲一下,手中的笔却迟迟不肯放下。休息之余,想到两点一线的生活,想到堆积如山的作业,心中一阵烦闷,怪自己太笨,不懂得“复制”别人的.作业,让自己放松一下,可这个念头才一出世,就被理智给抹了。是啊,我要的是才学,并不是那纸上的分数。
夕阳西下,柔和的金色光芒洒满了大地,白色的墙也变成了金色。小小的蜗牛还在向上爬着。我几乎已经不能看到那小小的一点了。但我知道,它一定会到达屋顶的。它身后那条长长的痕迹就见证了它的努力。它让我明白了,路是一步步走出来的。
时光飞逝,中考的日子转眼已经到了,一路的艰辛就要化作成功的光芒,我很兴奋。
蜗牛如我,在不懈地努力着;我似蜗牛,为小小的梦不断地拼搏着。
蜗牛告诉我:留下的痕迹,便是最好的注脚。
直至现在,我才得以体会,原来落叶没有痕迹。落叶教会风,风的那些不好的想法,那些心灵的.萌动,被高挂于树枝的树叶教诲。树叶曾悲哀,自己为何无法像同根生的花朵般绚丽,惹人喜欢,为何无法似果实般富有极大的魅力,拥有呵护,树叶悲哀,而后,树叶变得一震不起,在一个美好的秋天,本该树叶变成落叶,落叶也无悔,是天使,那位上帝派遣而来的天使,让树叶重获新生,树叶感激不尽,天使求助树叶帮忙:帮助陷于苦难中的万物解脱,让万物无须再轻生,树叶答应了,树叶帮天使分担了上帝的任务,树叶恋上天使。树叶遇到风,风总是粗暴的欺负着树叶,而树叶没有抱怨,直到树叶只剩下一点生命,树叶教诲了风,风获救,而树叶却变成落叶,风恋上的树叶。树叶虽成落叶,但其无悔无怨,他只知此是报答,此是救助。风试图寻找落叶的痕迹,望将其收藏起,但寻无。落叶只想让风获解,并无求报酬之心,也是想风忘去曾经自己伤害了落叶。
落叶——其实也代表着我们生活中的某种人不是吗?
落叶——亦是那些默默无闻,处于无人得知的角落,带来的却是对万物的兆福。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
1。 叙述的人称
英语的记叙文一般是以第一或第三人称的角度来叙述的。用第一称表示的是由叙述者亲眼所见、亲耳所闻的经历。它的优点在于能把故事的情节通过“我”来传达给读者,使人到真实可信,如身临其境。如:
The other day, I was driving along the street。 Suddenly, a car lost its control and ran directly towards me fast。 I was so frightened that I quickly turned to the left side。 But it was too late。 The car hit my bike and I fell off it。
用第三人称叙述,优点在于叙述者不受“我”活动范围以内的人和事物的限制,而是通过作者与读者之外的第三者,直接把故事中的情节展现在读者面前,文章的客观性很强。如:
Little Tom was going to school with an umbrella, for it was raining hard。 On the way, he saw an old woman walking in the rain with nothing to cover。 Tom went up to the old woman and wanted to share the umbrella with her, but he was too short。 What could he do? Then he had a good idea。
2。 动词的时态
在记叙文中,记和叙都离不开动词。所以动词出现率最高,且富于变化。记叙文中用得最多的是动词的过去的',这是英语记叙文区别于汉语记叙文的关键之处。英语写作的优美之处就在于这些动词时态的变化,正是这一点才使得所记、所叙有鲜活的动态感、鲜明的层次感和立体感。
3。 叙述的顺序
记叙一件事要有一定的顺序。无论是顺叙、倒叙、插叙还是补叙,都要让读者能弄清事情的来龙去脉。顺叙最容易操作,较容易给读者提供有关事情的空间和时间线索。但这种方法也容易使文章显得平铺直叙,读起来平淡乏味。倒叙、插叙、补叙等叙述方法能有效地提高文章的结构效果,让所叙之事跌宕起伏,使读者在阅读时思维产生较大的跳跃,从而为文章所吸引,深入其中。但这些方法如果使用不当,则容易弄巧成拙,使文章结构散乱,头绪不清,让读者不知所云。
4。 叙述的过渡
过渡在上下文中起着承上启下、融会贯通的作用。过渡往往用在地点转移或时间、事件转换以及由概括说明到具体叙述时。如:
In my summer holidays, I did a lot of things。 Apart form doing my homework, reading an English novel, watching TV and doing some housework, I went on a trip to Qingdao。 It is really a beautiful city。 There are many places of interest to see。 But what impressed me most was the sunrise。
The next morning I got up early。 I was very happy because it was a fine day。 By the time I got to the beach, the clouds on the horizon were turning red。 In a little while, a small part of the sun was gradually appearing。 The sun was very red, not shining。 It rose slowly。 At last it broke through the red clouds and jumped above the sea, just like a deep-red ball。 At the same time the clouds and the sea water became red and bright。
What a moving and unforgettable scene!
5。 叙述与对话
引用故事情节中主要人物的对话是记叙文提高表现力的一种好方法。适当地用直接引语代替间接的主观叙述,可以客观生动地反映人物的性格、品质和心理状态,使记叙生动、有趣,使文章内容更加充实、具体。试比较下面两段的叙述效果:
I was in the kitchen, and I was cooking something。 Suddenly I heard a loud noise from the front。 I thought maybe someone was knocking the door。 I asked who it was but I heard no reply。 After a while I saw my cat running across the parlor。 I realized it was the cat。 I felt released。
这本来应是一段故事性很强的文字,但经作者这么一写,就不那么吸引人了。原因是文中用的都是叙述模式,没有人物语言,把“悬念”给冲淡了。可作如下调整:
I was in the kitchen cooking something。 "Crash!" a loud noise came from the front。 Thinking someone was knocking at the door, I asked, "Who?" No reply。 After a while, I saw my cat running across the parlor。 "It's you。" I said, quite released。
直至现在,我才得以体会,原来落叶没有痕迹。落叶教会风,风的那些不好的想法,那些心灵的萌动,被高挂于树枝的树叶教诲。树叶曾悲哀,自己为何无法像同根生的花朵般绚丽,惹人喜欢,为何无法似果实般富有极大的魅力,拥有呵护,树叶悲哀,而后,树叶变得一震不起,在一个美好的秋天,本该树叶变成落叶,落叶也无悔,是天使,那位上帝派遣而来的天使,让树叶重获新生,树叶感激不尽,天使求助树叶帮忙:帮助陷于苦难中的万物解脱,让万物无须再轻生,树叶答应了,树叶帮天使分担了上帝的任务,树叶恋上天使。树叶遇到风,风总是粗暴的欺负着树叶,而树叶没有抱怨,直到树叶只剩下一点生命,树叶教诲了风,风获救,而树叶却变成落叶,风恋上的树叶。树叶虽成落叶,但其无悔无怨,他只知此是报答,此是救助。风试图寻找落叶的痕迹,望将其收藏起,但寻无。落叶只想让风获解,并无求报酬之心,也是想风忘去曾经自己伤害了落叶。
落叶——其实也代表着我们生活中的某种人不是吗?
落叶——亦是那些默默无闻,处于无人得知的角落,带来的却是对万物的兆福。
曾经,我是那片树叶,我渴望有那个天使来营救我,那天使我遇到了,我想为我的`天使分担重任,想去使某人获救,而我无奈,我的力量无足让他获解,我希望我的天使将他解救。而天使亦是落叶,天使亦无痕迹,恋你,我何须那大爱,大爱无疆,我没有,我有的只是想帮你分担的心,用我的心送你,你接吗?
落叶几许有痕迹,我的大爱几许有疆,只是那份心意罢了,只是那颗心罢了。
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