此类例子往往缺乏客观性和说服力,由于第一人称的局限导致所叙述事件难免“鸡毛蒜皮”。要明白,个人不代表整体。
例:I keep my dog to avoid my loneliness and I find a lot of fun.
这样的例子让人犹如在看记叙文,和议论文很不搭调。
雅思考试有条写作指令叫做:Include relevant examples from your own experience. 所以很多考生在考试时都喜欢使用举例法(exemplification。这一扩展方式本身无可厚非,然而在使用时几种例子是不适合的。
选好词汇之后,就选择搭配,但搭配的组合一定要与自己的观点相符:
influences我们通常都和positive / negative 搭配;advertisements也可以分为commercials和non-profit adverts;people可以用the general public替代,所以句子如下:
Commercials and non-profit adverts have both positive and negative influences on the general public.
这就是将简单句进行华丽变身的方法啦~最后环球君要给大家出个题目哦!
本周考题
Community service is helpful for both students and society.
这句话老师的扩句版本为
Establishing community service as a compulsory part in high school education is not only helpful for students but also meaningful for whole society.
这是我最头疼的地方,我BEC的成绩里听力是WEAK:(而我在复习计划的前几天是听真题,做点分析,但做下来的效果很差,基本都是错20到15个,虽然天天在空闲的时候都挂着个MP3听真题和BBC,但真的进展很小。听力这玩意,确实不是一天两天的'事情,是长时间积累的结果。所以在最后8天,我改变了策略,我在这里下了听力机经,发现其实版本并不多(没我想像的多,我想起码100来个VERSION),而且每个SECTION的主题很少有重复的,这就为牢固的记忆提供了保障,雅思英语《很高兴,10天,7分》。所以我用了7天,每天4个小时来背机经,然后最后一天把全部看了一遍,然后运气特别好,在考试的时候正好遇到两个SECTION(考的时候我都快笑出来了),而且另外两个部分我都听的不错,虽然最后一篇很有几个没听清楚。
建议:短期复习的朋友,在最后一段时间去背机经是很有用处的,因为听力这东西一定要经过长时间的锻炼(虽然背机经是一个很痛苦的过程),既然没有足够的时间,那就背机经当抱佛脚吧。
虽然来源于身边社会,但不可让描述方式变的太鸡毛蒜皮,拿不上台面。其实这点非常容易办到,只需要把事件中某一个具体的你,我,他,变成是客观群体,比如说people across the globe, students, they之类的人称即可。
举例的常见表达方式:
for example,/for instance,(后加句子)
Such as/ like (后加词组)
Take... as an example,
A case in point is that......
其次,在举例时还应注意尺度。
1. 应避免使用第一人称和第二人称,为了加强客观性,应将人称写成第三人称。
改正:Those people who raise pets, such as dogs and cats, are more likely to gain happiness and relieve their loneliness.(那些养宠物,例如养猫和养狗的人往往更容易获得快乐并且缓解孤独感)
2. 应避免引用一项调查研究,并同时伴有过多数据。应将数据去掉,用含糊的方法表示。
改正:There is much evidence to show that the number of people smoking has increased at an alarming rate in China. (大量证据表明。。。)
3. 应避免将例子局限在一个国家,尤其是中国。应将范围放至全世界。
改正:Many children around the world like to sit in front of the screen for a long time, leading to their poor eyesight.(在全世界,许多孩子在屏幕前待太久,导致了他们的视力减弱。
“全世界”的表达方式:around the world, all over the world, across the globe
【写作真题】The advocates of international aid believe that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while the opponents consider it necessary, because money is misspent by the governments that receive it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【名师献计】This aid is essential to the homeless and useful in helping recipient countries return to their normal state after major disturbances. For example, with the humanitarian relief obtained worldwide on an annual basis, victims of natural disasters (such as tsunami, drought, flood throughout the world can recover rapidly and rebuild their homeland.
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