一篇作文写的不好该怎么评语【一】
这个五一，我陪者父母来到了威海，在这片黄金海滩边有一片波澜壮阔的大海，这些地方留下了我许多美好的回忆。
我刚来到沙滩时，妈妈就叫我去礁石上戏耍，我走过去，站在礁石上，凉滋滋的海水轻轻地抚摸着我的脚面。洁白的浪花追逐着人们的脚印，发出“哗啦，哗啦”的“笑声”。海风是那样凉爽，像一只只小鱼似的滑过我的腿间。
我轻快地跳上沙滩，嘴里哼着欢快的小曲，我望着蔚蓝的天空，小鸟自由地飞翔着，一朵朵雪白的云朵成了数不清的羊群。深蓝色的大海和蔚蓝的天空紧紧相连，一幅自然而美丽的海景画承现在我的眼前，在阳光的照射下，这幅美丽的图画更加充满生机，充满活力。
海是无边无际的，近出的海的海面是那么明净透彻。轻轻的微波渐渐地向岸边移来，越来越近，冲在沙滩上，岩石上，泛出层层白花，溅起颗颗银珠，又悄悄地消失在海滩上。远望，海水和天空似乎一种颜色，海天仿佛连在一起。天边漂浮着几朵白云，恰如出海捕鱼的船帆，缓缓地向远方剽去。
太阳渐渐落下去，一朵朵白色的浪花轻轻拍打着堤岸，带给我欢乐与回忆。
一篇作文写的不好该怎么评语【二】
今天是五一劳动节，学校为了响应上级的号召，特地放了一天假，让我们帮父母干一些力所能及的事。
“快起来啦，小宜，今天是五一劳动节，你休想在老妈我的面前偷懒！”一大清早，我就被老妈的“河东狮吼功”吓得“屁滚尿流”。我不得不与心爱的被子说声“拜拜”，开始了一天的劳动。
吃完了饭，本来想偷偷地溜出去玩，可却逃不过老妈的“火眼金睛”和“五指山”。我狼狈地被老妈揪着耳朵，“你这小姑娘，整天只想着玩呀玩呀，什么时候知道做正经事啊？快给我洗完去！”“遵命，老妈大人！”最终，我屈服在了老妈的“淫威”之下。
这碗可真难洗，浑身滑滑的，差一点就摔碎了。咦，老妈洗碗时不是用的热水和洗洁精吗？原来是这两样东西没用啊，怪不得洗了半天都没洗好。我小心翼翼地端来了一盆热水，滴了一滴洗洁精。咦，这碗怎么变得这么听话？任我控制。不一会儿，所有的碗都洗好了。
“小宜懂事啦，会帮妈妈干活了。”老妈温柔地对我说。突然我看见妈妈的两鬓多了一些白发。这已经不再是我认识的那个年轻的妈妈了。妈妈为了我的成长付出了心，从不图回报，而我却······
这个劳动节让我觉得自己懂事了许多，我要多帮妈妈做一些力所能及的事。这个劳动节，让我很快乐！
一篇作文写的不好该怎么评语【三】
On the first day of the rest, mom and dad and I went to ningbo sea world and youngor zoo.
We first came to the sea world. Once in the aquarium, dad took me to see the sea precious animals. Have the hippocampus, giant salamander, heavy sea turtles, and cute little penguins. Overhead transparent glass in all kinds of fish swimming happily in the, I seem to feel also came to the underwater world.
Out of the aquarium, went to the ocean theatre, there are Marine animals.
Walrus in sit-ups, music we call "good", then we show the water ballet, see it stretch your head, around circle, also push the feet, how interesting! From Japan's "three sisters" sea lions, each have each skill: within a will do ten arithmetic, a lifting weights, is another ball player. Next, two beluga whales the staff with mouth top up from the water. Finally, dolphins sang a song for us, that caused a cheer.
Out of the sea world, we went to the youngor zoo. In the zoo, I saw a fierce the east-northern tiger and the tiger, mighty lion and white lion. In the panda garden, I finally met our national treasure, the giant panda. They are naughty flip, also eat bamboo. Beautiful peacock contended for the tail, to show us their beauty.
Travel over, although very tired, but I am very happy!
一篇作文写的不好该怎么评语【四】
May first is a Sunday. And it is the Labor's Day.
My mother said to me:"Open your eyes!And look out of the window. What a fine day! Let's go to park,"So my mother, my classmate and I went to the park.
We took some foods in my schoolbag.
On the way to the park. I saw the blue sky with snow-white clouds. I saw pear trees and some apple trees and so on. Below the trees, there are several kinds of flowers.
It's colorful, blue, red, yellow, pink, purple, orange and white. I saw some balloons and butterflies in the sky. I ate popcorn, cornflakes, banana and lollipop. They were wonderful.
In the afternoon, we went to the zoo. I visited the birds, mice, cats, dogs, budgies, hamsters, rabbits and so on.
May Day is my favorite day.
一篇作文写的不好该怎么评语【五】
奶奶养的大母鸡孵出了十几只小鸡。他们一个个毛茸茸的，有的全是的毛黄黄的，有的黑白相间，有的全身咖啡色，他们整天叽叽的叫个不停，一刻不离的跟在母鸡的屁股后面，真惹人喜爱。我和哥哥看小鸡那么可爱，心想去捉一只玩玩吧。可是母鸡一刻都不离开小鸡怎么办？我们绞尽脑汁想了一个办法。我们找来了一根细棒子，哥哥拿起棒子朝鸡群乱打，母鸡慌了，带着小鸡逃到草丛里，嘴里不停得“咯咯”叫，肯定是在骂：你这俩个坏小子，下次我饶不了你们。他们东躲西逃，跑到草丛里不见了。忽然，我看见一只掉队的小鸡伸长脖子“叽叽”的响亮的.叫着，看样子非常的惊慌。我箭一样的冲过去捉住它。小鸡在我的手上叽叽的叫得更加响了，好像是在叫母鸡快来救它。我和哥哥开心及了，一会儿摸摸它的头，一会儿摸摸它的脚，好像捧着一个毛线团。
我们正玩的开心，母鸡飞快的从草丛里冲过来，它全身的羽毛都竖起来，尖尖的嘴巴啄向我们。我们俩捧着小鸡就跑，母鸡在后面马不停蹄地追。我们吓得拔腿就跑，我们被追得叫苦连天，脚上被啄得火辣辣的痛。真是狼狈不堪。自从这次抓小鸡过后，母鸡一见我们就竖起羽毛愤怒地盯着我们，母鸡平时看上去胆小如鼠，可是有人伤害到自己的孩子，就算遇到在强大的对手他也会奋勇拼搏，保护自己的孩子，母爱是伟大的！母鸡真是不好惹啊！
