Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
我的家乡,山东省菏泽市作为牡丹发源地之一,早已成为当今著名的旅游胜地。能够尽享的游览与徜徉于牡丹园里是我一直以来的向往。可是,事非人愿,正像儿时学的一首《我想去桂林》歌曲中的“有时间的时候没有钱,有钱的时候没有时间”所体现的那样,直到毕业后才真正的了解这句话的内涵。
儿时的我不知曾多少次脚蹬二八大杠自行车,只因拿不出门票钱,只能透过大门望眼欲穿,当时我就对自己说等我有钱了我一定会到此一游领略园内风光;后来我长大了,来到了美丽的海滨日照在此参加工作。可是,伴随着每天繁忙的工作,有时候甚至连日历也顾不得翻阅,仅有的假期也是甚少甚短。工作期间也曾多少次坐大巴往返菏泽至日照途经牡丹园,但也只能飞速驶去,好似过眼云烟,说看到的牡丹园匆匆几眼。之后,娶妻生子时间就更少了,只能将他埋藏在心底。
俗话说:“无巧不成书”,一次偶然的机会,大巴路过牡丹园时出现了一些故障,需要很长时间,这才让我停下脚步有机会来到了使我魂牵梦绕的牡丹园。此时,已经无数个牡丹图样、画面及园内景观展现在脑海里。站立远方就能看到巍峨壮观的牡丹园大门拔地而起。走近“牡丹园”放眼望去,只见五个苍劲有力金灿灿的“曹州牡丹园”大字悬挂在大门上方,据导游讲:“此名是中国著名书法家、政治家,曾担任中国书法协会第一任主席,后被伟大领袖称赞为“党内一枝笔,红军书法家”之称的舒同先生所题”。大门的建筑是仿明样式筑成的,飞檐角翘,雕花彩绘,金碧辉煌,既敞朗宏伟,又古朴典雅。大门两旁还伫立着两座雕琢精细、雄伟壮观的'石狮子。
当我走到大门时,犹豫了一下,心想马上就要身临牡丹园之境,要用相机拍摄出那最美丽的瞬间,怀揣着一个美好的愿望踏入了园内的第一寸土地。跟着导游的步伐首先来到了北观赏区,驻足脚步一片片牡丹展现在眼前,一眼望不到边,牡丹的美,远超于从未到过“牡丹园”人的想象。一股幽香顺风扑鼻而来,络绎不绝的游客们尽情的呼吸着牡丹花所散发出沁入心脾香;观赏着争奇斗艳、奇异色彩、艳丽姿容的牡丹,处在这样的环境真是一种惬意的享受啊。这时,导游对巍峨壮观的楼阁,牡丹中心的休息亭等逐一介绍,此刻,思绪飞扬的我已经将这些连成一体构成一幅幅绝妙无与伦比的牡丹图,一步一景,一景一感受,真是人间仙境。我慢慢的观察,思绪肆意的活跃着,突然想起宋朝著名的画家冯止水用尽一生画出了《牡丹亭少女》;这位被堪称世界第一牡丹画家的张志文,所做牡丹名画颇多,每一幅画都将牡丹描绘的栩栩如生。站在花海中观望着花色艳丽,冠绝群华之姿的牡丹,别用一番滋味在心头。
穿过艳丽容姿的牡丹,向西走去,不觉间就来到了观花楼,站在观花楼顶,居高临下,俯瞰望去,此处的全景尽收眼底,一览无余。展现出广阔的牡丹、身姿优美的雕像以及身着色彩斑斓服装的游客们,如仙境般场景。伫立在牡丹中心的雕像便是葛斤和玉版两座仙子塑像,细看,七彩披帛搭在肩上,旋绕于手臂间,贯穿着身后及两侧,身姿优美,容光焕发,炯炯有神,可谓是雕刻的活灵活现。此刻,只听旁边几位游客拿着佳能、索尼、三星等不同的相机不停地“咔嚓、咔嚓”,扳动着相机快门,美丽的景色中又增添了不少情趣和韵味,我也用自己的相机记录个个角落。
紧接着我们来到了一条花溪旁,我们按照导游的安排几人一组,乘坐着木船缓缓向前驶去。或许是哪家调皮孩子将色彩缤纷的牡丹花朵纠了下来散落着水里,微风拂过,花朵婆娑,水面涟漪,构成一幅幅水上牡丹,可谓是水上之绝笔。和我乘一起的游客们有的双手驾着双桨体验划船的感觉、有的拿起相机记录着每步脚步、有的将手伸进凉丝丝的水中嬉笑言谈韵味十足。
此时,意犹未尽沉醉在这美丽风景中的我们被司机的声喊中唤醒了。是啊,再美的景观也只能停留于此了,无奈至极,带着遗憾的心情坐上驶往日照的大巴车上。只能将这一憧憧美憬记在相机里,记在心底里,依依不舍的我眼看着大巴车驶离了牡丹园,在车辆行驶的路上,我对相机里记录的场景,细细的翻阅着、观赏着、陶醉着、也思考着。
哦,故乡菏泽的牡丹,您是壮美秀丽的体现!
哦,心中牵挂的牡丹,您永远晃动在世人的眼前!
I was born in a beautiful town with high mountains around it.The mountains are covered with all kinds of green bamboo.Through the town runs a small stream.It’s said that a new railway is going to be built to the east of the town and a bamboo factory to the west.All the children of the school age can go to school.If anyone is ill,he can go to see the doctor in the newly-built hospital.People in the town are hard-working and never take the backwardness lying down.Though they are having a richer and better life,they are not satisfied with what they have got.They are working hard to build their town into a modern one.
首先,我们参观了牡丹花园,进了牡丹花园,先看到的是一座漂亮的喷泉。我们在喷泉前玩耍一会儿,而且还拍了很多照片。顺着喷泉朝前走,就是真正的牡丹花园了。花园里有各种各样的牡丹花,每到这个时候牡丹花就会争芳斗妍,万朵齐开。牡丹开放的时候,最小也足有一个足球那么大,花瓣层层叠叠,曲曲折折,形成一种自然的美。紧接着,一丝丝浓浓的花香会扑面而来,令人神清气爽、心旷神怡。花朵的色彩艳丽,真是令人羡慕。牡丹花的花期一共分为三个期限,早期,中期,晚期,加起来差不多是25天,我们现在已经是到了晚期了,虽然有很多花已经败了,但是还有一些花开着,依然很漂亮,这里不仅有美丽的牡丹花,而且还有美丽的芍药花,但是芍药还没有到开的时间。
星期天的.早上我们来到了孙膑的故里,里面有很多寺庙,还有很多菩萨的塑像,令我印象最深刻的是墙上雕刻的地狱变挂图,组要讲的就是人在人世间犯了什么罪,到地狱后酒后受到怎样的惩罚,特别有趣,他想告诉我们的就是,在人间要多做些善事,积善积德。
但我最喜欢的是孙膑的九宫八卦阵,很多人都在里面迷了路,但是我们没有,我们是见着路口就向左走,最后走到了中点,出来的时候我们差点迷了路,所以我们只好原路返回,最终可算转出来了。
菏泽可真漂亮,有机会我还要来菏泽玩。
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