导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
拨开层层云雾,卷起雨帘,收起雪幕,你会看到火热的太阳当空而悬,你会感叹道:“阳光,一直都在。”当你蹒跚学步时,有一双温暖的大手向你伸出,有一双眼睛慈爱地注视着你。当你迈出小小的一步时,有人脸上已绽开了笑容。
当你也伸出小小的手去回应那鼓励的目光时,却已经被抱个满怀。那时候,无论天气如何,你也会觉得“阳光”一直都在,因为你已在温暖的怀抱中挣脱不开。
当你“被迫”去补习时,那曾经充满了鼓励的眼神,会收起往日的温和,你当时一定被吓了一跳吧,心里疑惑:这还是小时候注视过我的眼睛吗?朋友,不必怀疑,难道你补习归来,没有看到丰盛的饭菜吗?难道没有人对你嘘寒问暖吗?这不也是一种温暖吗?其实,阳光,一直都在!当你没有获得鲜花与掌声时,那双关注的眼,会继续凝视着你,一刻也不放松。
诚然,它们有时会流露责怪与愤怒,这让你惊慌失措,忐忑不安,但你难道没有一丝的疏忽与闪失吗?你难道可以狂妄地以为自己十全十美吗?正是这双眼睛,为你指明了正途,希望你不要退却、伤悲……大概会有这么一天,那双眼睛忘记了自己的艰辛,劳累,满头白发再望向你的时候——那时,已然成熟的你,还会怀疑阳光的存在吗?阳光,一直都在!只要你用心寻找,爱就在心间,在生活的点滴之中!
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