上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【一】
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第1段：Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
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第2段：Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段：However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论：
第4段：Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【二】
Shanghai Disneyland will be open soon, as the day is so close, there are all kinds of trial run information released. The public is so looking forward to it and they want to have the honor become the first visitors. While after scanning the released information, they feel unsatisfied.
上海迪士尼乐园很快就要开放了,由于距离开放日子是如此的接近,各种各样的试行信息发布了出来。公众是如此的期待,他们希望能有荣幸成为第一批游客。然而在浏览了发布信息后,他们感到不满意。
The first is about the high entrance ticket. According to the average ticket of about 400 RMB, a family always need to pay at least for 3 persons, which means it takes them more than 1000 RMB. It is only the lowest budget for the local visitors, while for the nonlocal visitors, they need to pay for the hotel, which is a great expense.
第一个是关于高价格的门票。根据平均一张门票约400元,一个家庭总是需要支付至少3人,这意味着他们需要支付超过1000元人民币。然而最低的预算只是对于当地游客来说,而对于外地游客,他们需要支付酒店,这是一笔巨大的开销。
The second is the food in Disneyland. The offcial website has listed the price that offered in the amusement park. A beef burger with cheese is 80 RMB, a child-sized hot dog is 60 RMB and so on. Many people think it is such high price for them to pay. In that way, a family only pays for the food will cost more than 500 RMB!
第二个是迪斯尼乐园的食物。官方网站列出了游乐园提供的食物价格。一个牛肉汉堡和奶酪是80元,一个儿童的热狗是60元等等。许多人认为这是很高的价格。这样的话,一个家庭光支付食物就要超过500元!
The trial run of Shanghai Disneyland exposes many problems and the public concerns about the price. Maybe adjusting the price can attracts more tourists.
上海迪士尼乐园的试行反应了许多问题，公众关心的是价格。也许调整价格可以吸引更多的游客。
上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【三】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
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One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
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The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【四】
就一个小学毕业生的观察力、思维力、想象力、表达力和审美力来讲，是不会写出这样的文字的。这篇作文带着明显的家胶(或老师代笔的痕迹。这样的作文就不能算是好作文了。 二、不要抄袭别人的作文。抄袭是可耻的。在阅卷中，我们发现有一篇峪我喜欢傻弟弟》和中国少年儿童出版社出版的《小学生作文选评》中的.《傻弟弟》文章一模一样。不过《傻弟弟》是江苏省新沂县新安小学赵耀同学写的。这种背诵别人的文章，几乎一字不差地把它默写在作文卷上的作法，属于抄袭的性质，是不对的。
要知道阅卷老师比你看的、读的文章还要多，采取背默别人的文章的结果是把自己害了，落得作文成绩很槽搽! 三、不要照搬范文或将范文改头换面。考试中有的班从题日到选材，从结构到语言竟出现惊人的雷同。全班39人竞有。"= 0篇写《我喜欢小花猫》(考题是“我喜欢·…“，，，结构一也完全一样。还有一个班，占三分之二的同学写了《我喜欢的一件东西》。这种东西都写的是水彩颜料。开头竞然都是这样写的: “在我的小柜里，摆满了我喜欢的东西。有一支精致的圆珠笔，一盒水彩颜料，还有五颜六色的小球，其中我最喜欢的是那盒水彩颜料。”
还有一个班，九人都写《我喜欢小闹钟》，有八人把钟罩打碎了。实际生活能这样“不约而同”吗? 究其原因，可能是班上读了某篇散文，作为作文的参考和学习文章。要}n道。这是为了学习，并不是要去照搬。照搬的结果，会出现雷同，反映不出自己的写作水平，同样会影响考试成绩的， 四、不要胡编瞎诌，否则会出笑话的。 一篇作文写《我喜欢的小公鸡》，写的是他喂鸡，不久就从鸡窝里拾到四五个又圆又白的鸡蛋。小公鸡会下蛋，真是荒唐! 有一篇《我喜欢的小花猫》，其中一段是这样写的:老鼠爬到灯饱上，虽然小花猫上不去，可它把大眼睛转了儿下，就顺着蚊帐爬上去了，把电灯开关一开又爬一r一「来。
小花猫在灯下好象要石若小老鼠活2舌地烧。这时，老鼠已经被烧得奄奄一息了，又过了五分钟，小老下来。小花猫高兴得笑了。—一我们的小作者大概走进了小童话的世界吧了 产生以上问题的原因，主要是想得一个高分数，又想不花费气力，走条“捷径”。于是就用突击的手段，背、抄、编、凑。这种文凤是不足取的，我们应牢牢记住这样的教训。
预祝你们取得优异的成绩!
上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【五】
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
上海中考英语作文阅卷扫描【六】
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第1段：提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
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第2段：Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
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第3段：These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
