临沂市英语中考作文评分标准【一】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
临沂市英语中考作文评分标准【二】
每次读到“枯藤老树昏鸦”这句诗时，我总会想起老家的那株苍老的葡萄藤。葡萄摘完之后，叶子就开始往下掉，从深秋到冬季，葡萄藤就孤零零地站在那里，枯瘦的藤虬龙般缠绕着。有时候回去，我就静静地站在它面前。似在欣赏古老的风景，倾听生命的絮语。
曾经，这风景里，这葡萄藤下，还有一个人，一个深爱着我也让我挚爱一生的人——我的奶奶。
那个夏日的午后，我们就坐在碧绿的葡萄架下，温暖的风拂过脸颊。奶奶说，这棵葡萄藤在他的生命里已有10个年头了。在我之前，每年，他总会摘下一串最好的葡萄给爸爸吃。后来，她就把最好的留给我吃。
在那个凉秋时节，我乖乖地坐在屋里，凝望着她，她搬张凳子，站在葡萄架下，微倾着身子左看看，右看看，终于选中了一串，用剪刀去剪，剪好后，用手小心的托着，探下身子走下凳子，将葡萄放入篮中，又站上凳子，去剪另一串。我看着她那每一个细微而又缓慢的动作，终于忍不住走出屋子站在她旁边。她责怪我怎么出来了，会着凉的。我只是微笑，被骂是一种幸福。
又是一年秋天，一场秋雨，把葡萄藤下的葡萄一并打落掉在了地上。奶奶全然不知，她已经生病住院了。爸爸从超市买来了葡萄，让我送去给奶奶，就说是自家结的。
奶奶躺在病床上，惊喜地看着我，我却不敢看她，她瘦了好多。她见到了我手中的葡萄，说：“怎么，家里结葡萄了?”“嗯，爸爸摘了放冰箱里的。”我吞吞吐吐的回答。“你爸也真是的，怎么不等我出院了回去摘?玩一个到手了怎么办?”我的心似乎被堵住了，我怕忍不住，连忙转过身去。“今年的葡萄怎么有点酸啊?一定是多雨吧。”奶奶边吃边说。我的心隐隐作痛。
曾经，且听风吟;曾经，盈满甜蜜;曾经，忍住流泪。
如今，那个人已不在，偶尔回去，唯有那棵葡萄藤依然守在那里。看着它，那些熟悉的画面又浮现在我的眼前。思念，涌上心头。
临沂市英语中考作文评分标准【三】
导入：
第1段：Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文：
第2段：Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段：However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论：
第4段：Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
临沂市英语中考作文评分标准【四】
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
临沂市英语中考作文评分标准【五】
天有不测风云，但必定会迎来天晴;海有惊涛骇浪，但必定会看到风平浪静;路由曲曲折折，但必定会遇见风景之美……即使天再冷，也总会有它温暖的一刻。
人生的前进如一把双刃剑。带来了许多的奇妙欢乐，却又渗入了更多的负担，让人进退两难。只能在这黑漆漆的分岔路，独自摸索，寻找着，暖光何在……
踏上初三，我们遇上了前所未见过的艰难考验。仅仅几周的时间，我军初三级将士几乎全部阵亡。她在怒吼，他在喊娘，他们都快撑不住了……那也没办法。再怎么累，路，还是要走下去的。苦苦等待的周末终于来了，却又被那七大科目大神围攻，无奈只得孤军奋战。周六大清早七点多，我便起早贪黑赶作业。从朝阳东起到夕阳西下，只可惜革命尚未成功，终于，也阵亡了。
于是我出门散散步，无意照到一面镜子，想到某同学。刚开学见到他的忧郁仿佛整个人老了十年，一周后见到他的憔悴仿佛整个人只剩下十年了，昨天见到他的绝望仿佛整个人了十年了。哎，可怜的娃儿啊!恐怕我也快差不多了，边走边叹气，突然，我眼前一亮。看到公园里那温馨的画面。在暖暖夕照铺披下，两个马尾辫小姑娘，大约十三四岁，正值青春年华。她们，在哄带一个小宝宝，姐姐把他抱在怀中，俩姐妹左看看又望望，似乎在对宝宝进行全身大检查，似乎怕宝宝少了几根汗毛。看宝宝样子刚学会走路模样。瞧!两姐妹放下宝宝，推到后面几步，都张开那双天使之翼，等待宝宝的投怀。宝宝走了三步，愣住了，是害羞了吗?或许真的是难以做出选择吧。呵呵。姐妹俩见状，换了个方式。跟宝宝玩起了躲猫猫，一躲一现，一躲不见了踪影，一现绽放出那滑稽而青春羞涩的泛红，犹如昙花一现。逗得宝宝笑不拢嘴，露出了那两颗发育不完全的可爱小兔牙……暖透了我的心。
闭上双眼，仿佛离开了身体的躯壳，随风而去，飘向远方。眼前一片黑暗，茫无方向的飘浮，只见远方有一个光点，一直飘啊飘，一直浮啊浮……终于到了，是太阳光，充溢了我全身。每一个细胞，每一处毛孔，每一寸肌肤……都不放过。沐浴在阳光之中，那种感觉，妙不可言，一个字“暖”!在一个字“爽”!突然，“喵”一声猫叫，打破了这暖暖的安逸。吓我一跳，睁开双眼，天，已经黑了。在回家的诱惑路上，星星羞答答向我眨眼示意，照亮我的路。风儿轻轻抚摸拂过我的脸庞，任风吹乱我的头发。更重要的是，饭香味远远飘来香薰了我的味觉。我能感觉它的微温会走遍起我的身心。等等我，我来了……又再见作业，老友，我回来了。
以后，谁敢指着我的脑袋说，人生之路暗黑迷航无出路。我就指着他的鼻子告知，漫漫人生路，确实黑漆漆一片，你根本不知道，到底光芒在何方。这是很茫然，但你必须不断摸索下去，探寻着，坚持着，突然地，你会发现就在前放转角，有一团暖光，能照亮你的路，温暖你。
世事如此，都是同样的道理。在这么寒冷，走下去，总会有温暖帮你驱赶寒气，温暖你身心。
