本文格式正确,意思表述完整,行文流畅自然。作者在写作过程中注意长短句并用,还使用了以‘which,’引导的非限定性定语从句,从而使文章层次分明,富于变化,不愧为考场佳作。
High school is regarded as the best time in a person's life. As a senior three student, it won't take long before I graduate. Now, I have much to share with my fellow students.
高中被认为是一个人一生中最好的时间。作为一名三年级的学生,在我毕业前不需要很长时间。现在,我和我的同学们分享了很多。
Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation to those standing by me all the way, teachers, parents and friends included. Without their help and advice, my life would be different. Secondly, it's high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Above all, I've made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, "no pains, no gains."
首先,我想对我所有的方式,教师,家长和朋友包括我的赞赏。没有他们的帮助和建议,我的生活将是不同的。其次,是对我伤害或误解的同学说对不起的时候了。沟通和微笑是友谊的桥梁。最重要的是,我已经下决心要尽一切努力去学习,因为我相信努力工作是成功的关键。正如俗话所说:“没有痛苦,没有收获。”
Finally I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.
最后,我希望所有的年轻人都能充分利用时间,因为时间和时间等待任何人。
Some fish are forced to leave polluted water and are flying in the sky. But unfortunately, air is also so polluted that they have to wear masks. Each of them is crying, “Where is my home?” What a terrible sight!
Mankind has brought so much pollution. Waste is being poured into rivers and seas. Poisons to kill pests in farming and chemicals go into rivers and seas, too. Poisonous gasses from factories also make the air so dirty. The whole balance of nature is being destroyed as a result of our ignorance of the environmental protection.
Personally, man can not live alone on the earth. Should fish die from serious pollution, so would man! It is high time we did something to prevent such a scene from happening.
本文的“说理”非常成功。原因有二:一是作者客观、冷静而又饱含感情地分析了美貌、机敏、金钱等失去了诚信后的“危机”,显得全面而科学;二是用散文或诗一般的语言说理,显得活泼生动,具有可读性,富有吸引力;三是说理不矫揉造作,不生硬牵强,如谈话一般,娓娓道来,显得朴实亲切。因此,该文虽然创新成分不浓,但仍是一篇难得的佳作。
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