在“韩白骂战”中,“抽嘴巴”“付出的代价”等暴力字眼出现频率极高,由此现今社会暴力倾向严重可见一斑。作为长辈,作为有社会影响的人物,成天个把打啊啊啊等话儿挂在嘴边,这社会的暴力倾向能不严重吗?孩子从长辈那里得到一个讯息:以拳头解决问题。从家庭暴力到校园斗殴再到社会不良青年打群架,难道其中没有值得反省的东西?
以上是我从“韩白骂战”中看到的几个与现今社会现象有关的问题。
在牌子不远处,一个头系围巾,臂挎皮包,怀抱一个二、三岁孩子的中年妇女,正在用疑惑的目光,看着牌子下站着的那几个大男人。那个中年妇女为何不站在“母子上车处”那儿呢?原来那里已被这些大男人占据了,根本没有她容身的地方。
咦!真奇怪,这不是母子上车处吗?这几个大男人也不符合条件呀?这们不应该站在这里呀!哦,我明白了,他们一定不识字,不会呀,看他们的装束,个个衣冠楚楚,象个绅士似的,不应该连这五个字都不认识吧。那他们可能是没看见?也不可能,那五个字多醒目啊,只要眼睛没问题,肯定看得见。我知道了,他们识字,也看得见,只是装作没看见。
你瞧,第一个人,胖墩墩的,穿的大衣、裤子和皮鞋都是国际名牌,好象是个干部,而且有知识,有文化,可他依然站在母子上车处的位置。他眯着眼睛,旁若无人的样子,一看就是个虚伪的人,让人讨厌。
再看第二个人,戴顶军帽,穿件军大衣,两手兜里,闭着眼睛,盛气凌人。其实他心里没底,所以才闭上眼睛,躲避周围人的目光。警备
第三个人太可笑了,矮矮的个子,戴着一顶十分时髦的.帽子,两眼直勾勾地看着前方,不知道在想什么。大鼻下,有一张大嘴,嘴角向下撇着,看着让人厌恶。
最可笑的是第四个人,他索性戴上个大口罩,可能是怕别人认出来。他穿了件皮大衣,象是名医务工作者,他两眼角向下耷拉着,看起来既滑稽,又让人鄙视。
还有……
这些人明明认识字,为什么要装成假文盲呢?因为他们自私自利,只想到自己的利益,不为别人着想。他们早已把中华民族尊老爱幼的美德抛到了脑后,别看他们表面很干净,可内心是肮脏的。
由此我想到,社会上这种现象还真屡见不鲜:草坪上明明立着禁止践踏的牌子,可偏偏有人上去踩;公共场所明明写着禁止吸烟,可偏偏有人大大方方地吞云吐雾……
为什么会有如此现象呢?因为这些人是假文盲,真无德!
【习作题目】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
1.学生给老师打分已很普遍;
2.人们对其持不同态度(肯定或否定的态度);
3.你的看法。
【习作解读】
显然,此任务是写一篇议论文,主题为对学生给老师打分的现象进行议论,开放性较大。学生应根据实际情况,从多个方面阐述其原因并表达自己对这种现象的观点和态度。该话题更加贴近学生的实际生活,但有一定的语言难度,也有一定的思想深度。通过此文的写作,也从侧面提示了学生在注重写作基础训练的前提下,也应该注重培养积极思考、灵活运用、自由发挥等能力。
此次的写作任务出题相当巧妙,写作内容涉及的词汇和句型都属于新课程标准范围。题目在考查学生写作能力的同时,也在考查学生的分析判断能力及高度概括能力。富有想象力的学生写出的文章可能生动而富有灵性。此题目能引发学生对平日习以为常的行为进行反思,学会换位思考,这对中学生的性格和品德培养非常重要。
【习作展示】
Students Grading of Their Teachers
Nowadays, a lot of schools ask their students to contribute to grading their teachers. As a teacher, it is their responsibility to satisfy their students in all aspects. Meanwhile, it is admirable that school teachers prefer to expose themselves to their students.
If the system of grading of teachers by students is introduced, it will benefit students, teachers and the administration of the school for a number of reasons. For one thing, the system will give teachers and the administration of the school an insight into the minds of the students and show whether the teachers are successful in getting their lessons understood by the students; for another, it will also encourage the good teachers to continue their efforts and motivate themselves. What is more, it will expose those who are not doing enough and will lead them to correct their teaching methods as well as their attitude towards students. Thus the quality of teaching will certainly improve.
In a word, it is a promising concept and will bring surprisingly good results if applied with the right conditions.
【习作点评】
作者观点明确,赞成学生给老师打分。作为老师,就要做一个让学生满意的老师。这样,不仅对学生、学校有利,而且对老师本人也有利。这样,老师就会从另一个角度重新审视自己,看自己是否是一个成功的老师。如果得到学生的认可,这将是对自己的一次鼓励,为继续前行增添动力。如果学生的认可度不高,老师就应进行反思,调控教学方法和教学态度。这样,教学质量肯定会提高。作
者用简洁、明快的语言以及自己的经历列举了充分的论据,内容充实,贴近生活。For one thing, for another, what is more, in a word等过渡词的使用,是短文结构清晰,层次分明。最后,最值得一提的是,文中多次正确运用的高级词汇和复杂句式,给文章增添了不少文采。综上所述,这是一篇不可多得的佳作,值得向大家推荐。
二、写作模板
此模板适用于社会现象类议论文。参考模式如下:
Nowadays, there exists an increasingly serious social/economic/environmental There are a couple of reasons behind this problem/phenomenon. For one ;Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that more and more people
Nowadays, there exists a common phenomenon—with the development of the Internet, more and more people tend to send electronic cards instead of paper ones to their friends and relatives when an important holiday comes.
There are a couple of reasons behind this phenomenon. For one thing, compared with the traditional cards, electronic cards are more lively and interesting. They can give not only pictures but also sound and animation. For another, there are many websites online which offer varieties of cards for you to choose from. What is more, with the popularity of the electronic cards, less paper is used in making paper cards, which does good to our environment.
Based on the above discussions, I can easily forecast that sending greetings by using electronic cards will be accepted by more and more people, not only the young ones.
三、写作指导
写作思路是先列出一个具体的社会问题或者现象,然后分析产生的原因和产生的影响,最后提出解决问题的办法,或者得出结论,或者提出个人看法,或者预测前景。
论点、论据、论证是议论文的三要素。论点是作者对所议论问题所持有的见解和主张,论据是用来证明论点的事实和道理的根据;论证是用论据来证明论点的方法和过程。一般来说,议论文每段都有主题句来确定论点。论证的方法很多,但最常用的是因果分析法。即:分析事实与论点的因果关系,指出取得结果的原因是所要证明的论点,从而达到论证的目的。
在近几年的高考中,议论文的比重占得越来越多,议论文的.出题形式可以多种多样,有看图写作、图表、表格、书信等各种类型,但文体实际是议论文,而有时是夹叙的议论文。议论文的写作要点是:
1. 观点鲜明,文章一定有一个明确的中心论点。
2. 层次分明,一个中心论点通常有几个分论点支持,不同层次之间要分明,过渡清晰自然。
3. 最后一段一般要总结全文,得出一个符合逻辑的结论,突出中心思想。
4. 一般采用一般现在时。
5. 语言简洁有力,一般不采用口语。
四、巩固练习
1.【练习题目】
2010年上海世界博览会期间,上万的青年志愿者参加志愿工作,请你谈谈对此现象的看法。
【参考范文】
During the period of holding the 2010 World Expo in Shanghai, tens of thousands of young citizens are participating in volunteer work, hoping to devote themselves to the grand occasion. As far as I am concerned, everyone ought to enter for it. Here are the reasons I want to mention.
It can be argued that the advantages of doing unpaid volunteer work are enormous, because volunteer work is actually a two-way street. First of all, volunteer work should always benefit people who need help. Those who need help will feel happier due to our immediate help. On the other hand, as far as the young people ourselves are concerned, we have more opportunities to develop the sense of responsibility, independence as well as interpersonal skills in the process of helping others.
Through this kind of work, we become confident and mature. In addition, we can make many friends and increase our chances of getting the jobs of our dreams. Furthermore, volunteer work plays an active role in building up a harmonious society.
In a word, it is of great value for the young adults to offer volunteer work. The youth volunteers do make a difference by the voluntary work! Why not join them and do something for our country?
2.【练习题目】
某些中学生为了显示自己成熟或表明自己醋而吸烟。请写一篇120词左右的短文,列举吸烟的危害,并提出建议。
【参考范文】
I am sorry to know that more and more middle school students begin to smoke. I think it is wrong to believe that smoking is cool and even think that smoking makes you appear to be mature. In fact, smoking is not cool but very dangerous.
First, smoking can do much damage to health. Scientific researches show that smoking can lead to heart diseases, cancers and other problems. It is reported that about 5 million people die of diseases related to smoking each year all over the world.
Second, it is a waste of money to smoke cigarettes. Smoking can cost a great deal of money. Once you are addicted to it, it is difficult to give it up.
What’s more, smoking can cause fires easily, which may do great damage to your life and your surroundings.
So give up smoking at once! Only in this way can you keep healthy forever.
3. 【练习题目】近年来,越来越多的中学生出国学习,出现了所谓的中学生“出国热”。请根据以下提供的信息,谈谈自己的看法。
1)良好的语言环境,更利于语言学习。
2)拓宽视野,学习国外先进的科学技术。
3)传播各民族间的不同文化。
参考词汇:媒介,中间人:mediator
【参考范文】
In recent years, studying abroad has been popular. Tens of thousands of Chinese middle school students have gone to foreign countries to study.Many people are trying their best to apply to go abroad.
There are a number of reasons for attending schools abroad.First, students who are studying abroad can act as mediators between people of different cultures. They can communicate with each other directly and learn about different cultures. Second, they can learn much more advanced knowledge of science and technology from foreign countries and experience different education methods.Third, they live in foreign countries and take classes given by foreign teachers. As a result, they can learn foreign languages much more quickly.
Therefore, it is advisable to attend schools abroad.
4.【练习题目】随着经济和社会的发展,道路上的私人小汽车越来越多。请根据自己的观察和理解,谈谈自己的观点。
【参考范文】
With the fantastic development both in economy and in society in China, the number of people who own private cars is on the rise. Some people have bought cars of their own, and others are planning to buy cars. But I strongly object to the increase in developing private cars.
I hold that automobiles will give rise to a series of problems. In the first place, as more and more cars are produced and run on the road, a large volume of poisonous gas will be given off, polluting the atmosphere and causing actual harm to the health of people. Next, private cars contribute to traffic jams so greatly that the advantages gained in comfort and freedom are often cancelled out by the frustration caused by traffic jams. The last problem is the increasing number of car accidents that have killed and will kill a lot of people in a friction of a second.
In a word, although automobiles have been playing a vital part in the daily activities of our society, they also bring us numerous troubles such as more serious environmental pollution, more traffic accidents and more energy consumption. They drink up huge amounts of fuel and throw out huge amounts of pollutants. Jams waste our precious time. Therefore, I am against developing private cars.
7月22日上午9时左右,发生了21世纪以来最壮观的一次日全食,我们这里是最佳的观测地。
上午,我们早早的吃好了早餐,爸爸说要带我去看日食,还让我带上墨镜,我很好奇日食是什么?爸爸告诉我:“日食是太阳被月球遮住的现象。月球在绕地球运行过程中,有时会走到太阳和地球的中间,这时月球的影子落到地球表面上,位于影子里的观测者便会看到太阳被月球遮住,这就是日食。”据说今天在中国可以看到一次罕见的日全食。爸爸还上网给我看了相关的资料和图片,让我增长了许多知识。
9点半左右我们一家三口来到小区空旷的草地上,抬头看太阳,可惜太阳被乌云遮住了。妈妈建议到18楼顶楼上看看。幸亏有电梯,一下子到了18楼。望着被层层乌云包围的太阳,我们有些失望。等了一会儿,乌云散去。再到阳台一看,往日圆圆的太阳竟然少了二分之一!日食,真的是日食,我激动得要跳起来了,要知道,日食要两三百年才能在同一地方出现,天哪,我居然在十二岁前就看到了日全食,这可是一个了不起的事情!
看,太阳在一点一点的缩小。先是变作小船,然后变作柳叶眉,最后只剩下了一个底,天空突然暗下来,一切显得那么神秘。
接着,太阳慢慢变大,慢慢变圆,天空开始复原成往日的样子。
日全食,真的好美。
不久前爆发的“韩白骂战”闹得沸沸扬扬,在这里,我不谈事件根源,也不论孰是孰非。我不懂文学,当然也就不会争论什么文学不文学的,(这事儿恐怕不是文学争论那么简单咯)只说说从中看到的几个社会现象。
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