8月1日,是我们在日本旅游的第5天。我们坐飞机从北海道的扎榥飞往日本首都东京。上午在银座观光,下午,我和妈妈来到我向往很久的迪斯尼乐园。
我们一进门就看到迪斯尼的标志性建筑—城堡。它是一座白墙蓝瓦的城堡,十分壮观。首先,我和妈妈来到“星际旅行”这个游览项目:说是星际旅行,其实是一场真实感的电影。我们来到座位上坐好,听从指挥记系好安全带。不一会儿,电影开始了。我的座位开始慢慢地摇晃,感觉就像坐在太空飞船上,有种身临其境的感觉,非常刺激。
后来,我们还玩了星星火箭、赛车、旋转木马、爱丽丝的咖啡杯、小小世界等。这些都很好玩但我最喜欢的是“幽灵城堡”。来到城堡里面,先看见了一幅画慢慢的'变成了骷髅。广播里开始讲这个城堡的故事,好在故事都是用日语讲的,我听不懂,不感觉可怕。只听懂了可怕的笑声;我们坐上城堡的观光车往外看去,只见一扇扇门的把手没有人拉也会动,几个蜘蛛网上停着几个巨大蜘蛛,由悬浮着的幽灵、竖琴、骷髅;有些鬼魂在开宴会。还有些鬼魂躲在墓里,等你靠近的时候,它们会突然出来吓唬你……
时间过得飞快,不知不觉得到了集合的时间,我们吃好晚饭,依依不舍的离开了迪斯尼乐园。
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
导入:
第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
导入:
第1段:Recently we’ve had a discussion about whether we should... (导入话题
Our opinions are divided on this topic.(观点有分歧
正文:
第2段:Most of the students are in favour of it.(正方观点
Here are the reasons. First... Second... Finally...(列出2~3个赞成的理由
第3段:However, the others are strongly against it. (反方观点
Their reasons are as follows. In the first place... What’s more... In addition...(列出2~3个反对的理由
结论:
第4段:Personally speaking, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages, for it will do us more harm than good, so I support it.(个人观点 オ
暑假,我们一家人去了日本玩。我们去了东京的台场、大坂的展望台、天王寺、新大板等地,每一个地方都给我留下了深刻的印象。
日本的每一个地方都是那么干净,连街道上都一尘不染,看不到果皮纸屑。举目望去,到处是郁郁葱葱的大树,街道也在花花草草地点缀下更加整洁漂亮了这时,我忍不住深深地吸了口气,清新的空气直钻鼻窝,让人顿感神清气爽。
最有趣的经历就是我们去日本的环球影城玩。一进到环球影城,我就被那人山人海的阵势吓到了。我先去玩了星球大战,然后去玩巴斯光年了,后来我又去玩了激流勇进。尤其是激流勇进,真是太有趣了。我一开始激动地坐上去,它先是小幅度地冲了下去,然后就进入了朱罗纪公园,在这里,我看到了剑龙、三角龙、水龙和霸王龙。最后我们来到了一个洞穴,突然我们都掉了下去,我和妈妈都紧张地闭上了眼,突然一阵水花溅到了我们的身上,浇了我们一个“透心凉”。那感觉可真刺激!
美好的时光总是特别短暂,我们就要踏上去香港的旅程了。我依依不舍地离开了日本,但这段美好的回忆却深深地留在了我的心里。
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