深圳2024中考英语作文【一】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
深圳2024中考英语作文【二】
在滨海长廊旁边的树林里，从上往下看就象一片绿色的海洋。树林里，树很绿，草很青，鸟很多。一条石头铺成的路，走过整片树林，石头路的旁边有一片无边无际的大海，它叫“深圳湾”。
这是一片深蓝色的海洋，周围长着青绿色的小草，还有许多有大有小的石头也来凑热闹，一阵风吹过来，小草随风飘动，这些石头好像在看着小草舞蹈，被海浪送上岸来旅游的贝壳，有的停在沙滩上看完美丽的风景后，又被海浪送回海洋，有的被人们带到一个全新的世界。鸟是那样的多，有的横掠过海面，享受海水的凉爽，有的和风筝翩翩起舞，风在为它们伴奏，它们跳起了更加欢快的舞蹈，为深圳湾增添了许多生机。不用说，最有趣的肯定是那深蓝色的海浪了，一阵风吹过，大海唱起了歌儿，开始海浪很大，向前沖来，渐渐变小，最后在金色的沙滩上消失了。
这片大海，给我们带来了快乐，如果可以的话，我很想把海豚、海狮引过来，把这里变成一个海洋公园!
深圳2024中考英语作文【三】
今天我们来到了深圳世界之窗。我们一进大门我们就买了一本小册子，上面介绍了43个国家100多个景点的文化内涵和民俗风情。
世界之窗太大了，有48万平方里。我们坐了空中游览车。坐完游览车我们去看了中华门，韩国的景福宫，日本的富士山，马来西亚的万佛宝塔，泰国的泰王宫，老挝的将东寺，还有我印象最深的是埃菲尔铁塔，它高达108米，然后我们坐着电梯到了塔顶，我们在塔顶看一个人都很艰难，我往下一看，许多很高的楼房都变小了，妈妈都不敢往下看，因为太高了。
一路上妈妈带着我看了一些民俗风情表演。有印地安人跳的圈舞，他有20多个圈，他边跳边把圈套在自己的身上，不一会就把圈套完了。
我们坐着电瓶车穿越亚马逊丛林，总共路程800米只要了90秒的时间，速度太快了！
今天虽然我玩的很累，但是我学到了很多知识和快乐！
深圳2024中考英语作文【四】
在星期五，我们三四年级一起去深圳野生动物园。
那天温度大概是19—26摄氏度，我们一上车就在那精挑细选的座位子，其中我和王为就坐在了一起。下车了，吴老师给我们在门口找了几张相。一进动物园里肖练杰指着一个游乐场说：“我们进去吧！哈哈！哈哈！”
结果一看是宝宝乐园。大家都哈哈大笑，我们首先看到了孔雀，我们都喊着：“孔雀快点开屏！快点！”我们又去看了骆驼，骆驼非常的高。我们还去看了大象、矮马、长颈鹿。我们还看了鹦鹉表演杂技，还看了万兽盛会，那里面有一群表演野人的人他们跳的舞简直让人哈哈大笑。我们还去看了海洋动物表演，里面有一组小丑表演的让人笑的都没气了。
出动物园以后，我们一上车就有几个不听指挥的同学乱扔垃圾，结果被老师留下了。
今天是快乐的一天，是美好的一天。这次秋游永远记在我的脑海里，永远！永远！
深圳2024中考英语作文【五】
1。 叙述的人称
英语的记叙文一般是以第一或第三人称的角度来叙述的。用第一称表示的是由叙述者亲眼所见、亲耳所闻的经历。它的优点在于能把故事的情节通过“我”来传达给读者，使人到真实可信，如身临其境。如：
The other day， I was driving along the street。 Suddenly， a car lost its control and ran directly towards me fast。 I was so frightened that I quickly turned to the left side。 But it was too late。 The car hit my bike and I fell off it。
用第三人称叙述，优点在于叙述者不受“我”活动范围以内的人和事物的限制，而是通过作者与读者之外的第三者，直接把故事中的情节展现在读者面前，文章的客观性很强。如：
Little Tom was going to school with an umbrella， for it was raining hard。 On the way， he saw an old woman walking in the rain with nothing to cover。 Tom went up to the old woman and wanted to share the umbrella with her， but he was too short。 What could he do? Then he had a good idea。
2。 动词的时态
在记叙文中，记和叙都离不开动词。所以动词出现率最高，且富于变化。记叙文中用得最多的是动词的过去的\'，这是英语记叙文区别于汉语记叙文的关键之处。英语写作的优美之处就在于这些动词时态的变化，正是这一点才使得所记、所叙有鲜活的动态感、鲜明的层次感和立体感。
3。 叙述的顺序
记叙一件事要有一定的顺序。无论是顺叙、倒叙、插叙还是补叙，都要让读者能弄清事情的来龙去脉。顺叙最容易操作，较容易给读者提供有关事情的空间和时间线索。但这种方法也容易使文章显得平铺直叙，读起来平淡乏味。倒叙、插叙、补叙等叙述方法能有效地提高文章的结构效果，让所叙之事跌宕起伏，使读者在阅读时思维产生较大的跳跃，从而为文章所吸引，深入其中。但这些方法如果使用不当，则容易弄巧成拙，使文章结构散乱，头绪不清，让读者不知所云。
4。 叙述的过渡
过渡在上下文中起着承上启下、融会贯通的作用。过渡往往用在地点转移或时间、事件转换以及由概括说明到具体叙述时。如：
In my summer holidays， I did a lot of things。 Apart form doing my homework， reading an English novel， watching TV and doing some housework， I went on a trip to Qingdao。 It is really a beautiful city。 There are many places of interest to see。 But what impressed me most was the sunrise。
The next morning I got up early。 I was very happy because it was a fine day。 By the time I got to the beach， the clouds on the horizon were turning red。 In a little while， a small part of the sun was gradually appearing。 The sun was very red， not shining。 It rose slowly。 At last it broke through the red clouds and jumped above the sea， just like a deep-red ball。 At the same time the clouds and the sea water became red and bright。
What a moving and unforgettable scene!
5。 叙述与对话
引用故事情节中主要人物的对话是记叙文提高表现力的一种好方法。适当地用直接引语代替间接的主观叙述，可以客观生动地反映人物的性格、品质和心理状态，使记叙生动、有趣，使文章内容更加充实、具体。试比较下面两段的叙述效果：
I was in the kitchen， and I was cooking something。 Suddenly I heard a loud noise from the front。 I thought maybe someone was knocking the door。 I asked who it was but I heard no reply。 After a while I saw my cat running across the parlor。 I realized it was the cat。 I felt released。
这本来应是一段故事性很强的文字，但经作者这么一写，就不那么吸引人了。原因是文中用的都是叙述模式，没有人物语言，把“悬念”给冲淡了。可作如下调整：
I was in the kitchen cooking something。 "Crash!" a loud noise came from the front。 Thinking someone was knocking at the door， I asked， "Who?" No reply。 After a while， I saw my cat running across the parlor。 "It＇s you。" I said， quite released。
深圳2024中考英语作文【六】
今天的天气很好，我和姨妈骑单车到深圳湾公园。
到了深圳湾公园，这里的人特别多的，不过很多人都是跑到海边抓螃蟹，我看到很高兴，就把单车放一边，也下去抓螃蟹。我翻开石头，挖坑，但在水里挖坑是不成功，就只能翻石头找螃蟹。我翻了好多块石头总找不到螃蟹，没有放弃就继续找，最后放开一块石头里面有六只螃蟹，我马上把它们装在桶里，洗下手上的泥土，高兴的骑车回家了。
