中考英语作文老师会仔细看吗【一】
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
中考英语作文老师会仔细看吗【二】
1。 头绪分明，脉络清楚
写好记叙文，首先要头绪分明，脉络清楚，明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析，弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程，然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”，但动笔之前，围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心，详略得当
在文章的框架确定后，对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍，应该从表现文章主题的需要出发，分清主次，定好详略。要突出重点，详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节，略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化，使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题，也需要一定的技巧。如：
One night a man came to our house and told me， "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family， I saw the faces of those little children disfigured （破坏外貌） by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces， just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two， and went out， carrying half the rice。 When she came back， I asked her， "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer， "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言，准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动，又要表现力强，这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动，其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文：
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money， but they didn＇t take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后：
The other day， five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time， he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home， he started and crying。 Just then， two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy， why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom， I go home。" said the boy， still crying。
"Don＇t worry， we＇ll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy＇s house。 With the help of a policeman， they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound， she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully， she offered them some money， saying it was a way to express her thanks， but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
中考英语作文老师会仔细看吗【三】
导入：
第1段：Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文：
第2段：There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论：
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
中考英语作文老师会仔细看吗【四】
导入：
第1段：提出一种现象或某种困难作为议论的话题
正文：
第2段：Many ways can help to solve this serious problem, but the following may be most effective. First of all... Another way to solve the problem is ... Finally...(列出2~3个解决此类问题的办法
结论：
第3段：These are not the best but the only two/ three measures we can take. But it should be noted that we should take action to...(强调解决此类问题的根本方法
中考英语作文老师会仔细看吗【五】
当现实如此残酷的时候，当我们的距离这么一步一步的伸长的时候，每次望见你的时候，我的心都在痛，泪在流，如果可以重新来一遍的时候，我想到的一定会是你的感受，不会这么自私，不会把你的关心看作理所应当，不会了……
爽朗的天空却没有带来如天的心情，你正在气头上，我不应该像原来一样把你的心情不当回事。我那时候完全不知道事情的原委，那样不顾及你的感受，在你的面前眉飞色舞的说那么多。当你实在听不下去的时候，当你用含着泪水的眼对我说：我太过分的时候，我竟然还那么不知好歹的和你争吵，竟然没注意到你的泪水已经落下来了很多，地上已经湿了。当我生气的摔门而出的时候，我竟然没注意到你望着我的背影，心在默默的哭泣。
小新对我说，你的母亲那天去世了，你所以才哭的那么伤心，我崩溃了，我此时想到了你以前对我种种的好，那些场景就像放映机一样在我的脑海中重新放映了一遍，我哭了，我不该那样的。我哭着去你家找你，发现你正在家做饭，看见我来了，也只是简单的含蓄了一句，再也没有像原来一样那么关心我了，我很伤心。你说：当我的母亲去世的时候，我那个时候最需要你的安慰，但你却一句话也没有安慰我，还说了那么多伤我的心的话。我是个懦夫，我虽然对你有感情，但是我也有自己的尊严，我可以等你，但是我等不到最后，你要是留这吃饭的话，你就留吧，如果你想走的啊话，我不挽留。此时，我的泪水已经浸满了眼眶。
不是都说：天使也有犯错的时候，所以应该给每个人一次机会，我承认我错了，这都是我的不好，我不该伤你，你原谅我好不好，我不会再这样了，我希望我们之间的距离能够缩短。冰释前嫌，我希望在我们之间不是一个梦。
