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初三英语作文如何讲评【一】

雨，还在下着。这绵绵的细雨，就像我的思绪一样长，一样永无尽头，我站在外婆的坟前，眼泪又一次地流了下来……生：特定的景，特定的情，让人感受到怀念的沉重。

初三英语作文如何讲评【二】

When I was a freshman in college I watched the film Gua Sha Treatment for the first time, now I am a junior student and I come back to review the movie from a multicultural aspect, I have many different feelings after watching the film again.

At the beginning of the film, XuDatong is given an award and later he delivers a speech. What makes me impressed most is in his speech he says “one day I will become one of you, a truly successful American, today this award proved that America is a true land of opportunity and I am the living proof of that.” At that moment Xu thinks he has realized his American Dream totally with his lovingly wife and adorable son. However, I think it is ironical that to make a speech like that and I assume it is made on purpose to hind a clue for the story's development. How many non—American people have such a beautiful American dream? One of my classmate studies in American now and before he went aboard he told me his American dream is he can stand at the top of the New York. To be honest, I also dream that one day I can get the Green Card living there happily and successfully maybe working at the Wall Street. When Xu gets the award he thinks he entirely melted in the melting pot neglecting the multicultural obstruct, later the plot goes against the way he thinks. And later Quinlan asked Xu'why you be the scapegoat of your father?' Xu answers 'because he is Chinese.' Then maybe Xu knows that there is always a wide gap between Chinese and American cultures.

The second scene is Xu hit his son Denis because Denis hit the son of xu's boss, at the middle of the film xu tells his boss that he hit his own son is only to show his respect to his boss John Quinlan, that time Quinlan feels puzzled “what a Chinese logic”,yes, American can never understand such a logic full of Chinese characteristic, because they respect everyone including the children, they won't beat a child to please the boss, and there is no such a conception of degree between employee and employer, they feel everyone is equal, which is quite different from china.

Connected to the second scene, the third difference I want to analyze is the care for the children. In America, people pay more attention to the right of children which can be seen from the law—leaving children alone at home is illegal, while in China it is so common that almost everyone may experience such loneliness. And Children Welfare Agency does work in America which shows the importance Americans attach to children's right. What's more, I remember a line 'No one won the case, especially the child.' In my opinion, it also manifests the universal concern from the American public to the children.

The fourth aspect is following the procedure, in the film, more than there times, the people focus on the rule, the law, the procedure. At the Christmas Eve Xu wants to return back to his home pretending as a Santa Claus, what a pity, the security recognizes him and persuades 'you are always a good tenement, never causes troubles for me.' And another scene is at the end of the film , the judge says 'I have to follow the procedure.' However, in China people always have to ask for a favor to do something, and later you have to pay back the favor,for myself, I prefer the American style, strict to the procedure.

The fifth and the last point is the humors, Quinlan says 'you can't fall, your health security is the company paid.' 'Datong, welcome home, maybe next time, you can come from the front door.' 'dady, why you come from the window' ' because we don't have a chimney.' I really adore this distinguished American humor, especially in dangerous situations, which is quite rare in China.

That's my whole reaction to Gua Sha Treatment.

初三英语作文如何讲评【三】

一次体育活动，顾老师兴致勃勃地来到乒乓球台旁，要和我们打乒乓球，我们大笑，因为大家都知道她不会打。可她却是一副不服输的样子：“你们别笑，不会可以学嘛！你们可以当我的老师呀！”说完便投入“学习”。她右手持拍，背稍弯，一双有神的眼睛直盯着白色的小球，那略显肥胖的身子左右移动着。偶尔打了一个好球，她就会兴奋得跳了起来，有力地晃动着手中的拍子向我们示意，如果你是外人，你一定不会想到她是我们的老师。生１：顾老师的形象生动感人。我认为关键是细节描写起了作用，给人留下很具体的印象。生２：顾老师的形象是通过语言、动作、神情等方面惟妙惟肖的描写生动地体现出来的，生活气息浓，真实感很强。师：两位同学从多个侧面评析了节选的文章，较具体、全面，对我也很有启发。在这个基础上请大家谈谈写人记叙文主体部分写作时应注意些什么。

生１：记叙的事情要具体，有细节，要展现过程，不能像写评语那样干巴巴的几条筋。

生２：如果要写几件事，互相之间要有内在联系，所谓“形散神不散”。

生３：尽可能运用肖像、语言、动作、心理等多种描写手法，让人物自己展现内在的精神风貌。

师：同学们总结得很棒，为了便于记忆，我再将主体部分的写作要求概括为（板书）：具体化、立体化、一体化。“具体化”就是刚才大家说的用具体细节展现主人公的精神风貌、性格特点。“立体化”就是运用多种描写手法使人物形象丰满，从外形到精神气质，既要形似，更要神似；情节上跌宕起伏，甚至有令人意想不到之处，能扣人心弦。“一体化”就是讲求叙写的事情之间成为有机整体，脉相通，共同表现同一主题。下面我们进入第三个阶段，谈谈写人记叙文的结尾。