讲究卫生的作文及点评【一】
她静静地坐在残破的房间里，四周是布满弹孔的墙壁。几天天前，一群荷枪实弹的以色列士兵闯入她的家中搜查武装分子，当他们的目光扫过患有腰伤的哥哥身上的绷带时，枪声顿起。泊里，哥哥扭曲的身躯永远地印入她的脑海，滚滚的泪珠滑过她洁白的纱布。那天，一个十六岁的阿拉伯少女郑重地作出了她的选择：“我再也不要当什么老师、护士了，我要成为一名哈马斯战士，消灭犹太人，为我的国家而战！”
讲究卫生的作文及点评【二】
Why Are Trees Important?
Trees are very important to us. Do you know why? Let me tell you.
Trees take in carbon dioxide from the air and make oxygen. That's important. People and animals need oxygen to live. Many small animals and insects live in the trees. Some of them also get food from trees. Trees can also stop water and soil from going away. If we have a lot of trees, we stop deserts from being large. I think this is very important. You know, trees are green. They can make our country even more beautiful.
Trees are our good friends. We should plant more trees and take good care of them.
点评：文章先阐明论点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。
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It's Our Duty To Protect Our Environment
It's our duty to protect our environment. Where we live? The earth. The earth is the only one place we live in. So you know how important the environment is. But now, some people are harming the environment, like cutting down trees, drawing pictures on public walls, littering onto the ground. It's terrible if we still do it. Now, it's time for all the people in the society to protect the environment. It's our duty. It needs each of us to make a contribution to improving the environment. We should make our environment more and more beautiful.
点评：作者多用学过的'词语不但保证了正确，还巩固了所学的知识，并且注意句型的多样化，如长句，短句，疑问句，使用了“if，so, now, but”等词，整篇文章读起来朗朗上口。实际上，写文章就像串珠子，连接词就在于把一个个单词串起来。
讲究卫生的作文及点评【三】
男孩和女孩相遇。她纯白色的纱布下是一排密密的炸弹，他绿色的贝蕾帽下是一双凶狠的眼睛。不知是她先引爆炸弹还是他先射出子弹？但有一点可以肯定：埋葬他们的尸体时，又会有无数十六七岁的孩子作出与他们当年相同的选择。就像一个复仇的轮回，继续下去。
讲究卫生的作文及点评【四】
一个十六岁的女孩郑重地写下她的选择：当她长大，她要背起行装踏上中东的土地。她要在被推倒的隔离墙的废墟上，建立起一座学校，让巴勒斯坦和以色列的孩子在一起学习，让仇恨的目光变成快乐的笑容，让恨的种子成长为爱的大树，让两个民族的未来通向理解与新生的道路，令真主和上帝对视，露出会心的微笑！
