金华是一座神秘的古堡,
他象征着金华的市民们。
他在世已经很老很老了,
在世是永远也不会的。
金华火腿甲天下,
火腿像珍珠一般。
不是我吹牛啊,
广大群众也来赞美一翻吧!
金华的酥饼吃过吗?
那可是香味飘香啊!
一个个美丽的神话,
都流传在金华。
金华也是一座文明古城,
他也可以称为是年轻人。
他对自己的业绩,
那是相当的满意。
金华,你是人的汗!
你也值得让我们关怀。
金华,你的贡献是伟大的,
你的疯狂举动让人难以执行
我们首先要去的是朝真洞。山路弯弯,绕来绕去,到了目的地后,导游带我们参观洞穴。我们大汗淋漓地进了洞,立即感到凉意十足。洞里的钟乳石形状各异。导游说,钟乳石生长缓慢,每一百年,才长出一厘米。它们的传说都很浪漫,外表也很富丽堂皇。我还发现了很多蝙蝠,说明了这里没有阳光射入,蝙蝠是喜欢呆在黑暗中的。往下走是一线天,这个洞以一隙天光为奇,上面的石头有一大条裂缝,而且很细,只有一丝阳光。朝真洞给我的感觉是:崎岖、深长,传说众多。
接下来,我们要到双龙洞去。双龙洞外面,有一条小溪,上面架设了一座石桥。溪水很清,我忍不住下了水,那水很像冰水,我的脚像是要冻僵了似的。没想到这么炎热的夏天,还有这么冰的'溪水,简直是不可思议。
往前走就是双龙洞了,我们要平躺在船上,被缆绳拉进洞里去。在船上不能抬头,否则会被山石碰伤。但就算不抬头,我也有种恐惧感。导游领着我们边走边看景点,像“青蛙盗仙草”、“倒挂蝙蝠”、“龟蛇大战”等。我觉得其中“寿星仙桃”是最与传说相贴近的,那块巨大的石头真的很像一个老爷爷抱着一个桃子。走不多远,就是冰壶洞。导游说它的外形像一个壶,里面却很冷,所以叫这个名字,这时,我才注意到导游为何穿羽绒服了。进洞之后,我浑身打颤,不少人和我一样,冷得够呛,两手抱在胸前。循着声音,我们来到一道瀑布前,因为这是在洞里,瀑布的声音特别巨大,我都听不见别人讲话的声音了。往上走有一座石桥,桥旁又是一道瀑布,这道瀑布落差很大,比先前那道瀑布要壮观得多。整个双龙洞给我的感觉,恰如古人所说:“洞中有洞洞中泉,欲觅泉源卧小船”,“千尺横梁压水低,轻舟仰卧人回溪。”
整个金华山景点很多,我们只是去了其中的几个景点。虽难我略带遗憾,但我总算亲眼目睹了叶圣陶笔下的金华双龙洞,而且,看到这篇文章已被刻在一块巨石之上,所以,我觉得这次旅行特别有意义,因此才写下了这篇。
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第1段:Some people hold the opinion that A is superior to B in many ways. Others, however, argue that B is much better. Personally, I would prefer A because I think A has more advantages.
正文:
第2段:There are many reasons why I prefer A. The main reason is that ... Another reason is that...(赞同A的原因
第3段: Of course, B also has advantages to some extent... (列出1~2个B的优势
结论:
第4段: But if all these factors are considered, A is much better than B. From what has been discussed above, we may finally draw the conclusion that ...(得出结论 オ
Last Sunday, Jim went out to fly a kite. The kite flew highly in the sky. Jim ran with it happily.
Suddenly the line was broken and the kite flew away. Soon it disappeared. Where was it?
Jim had no idea. So he had to run here and there to look for the kite. At last he saw it on the top of the tree. He tried to get it down. But he couldn’t. He felt sad.
1。 头绪分明,脉络清楚
写好记叙文,首先要头绪分明,脉络清楚,明确文章要求写什么。要对所写的事件或人物进行分析,弄清事件发生、发展一直到结束的整个过程,然后再收集选取素材。这些素材都应该跟上述五个“ W ”和一个“ H ”有关。尽管不是每篇记叙文里都必须包括这些“ W ”和“ H ”,但动笔之前,围绕五个“ W ”和“ H ”进行构思是必不可少的。
2。 突出中心,详略得当
在文章的框架确定后,对支持故事的素材的选取是很关键的。选材要注意取舍,应该从表现文章主题的需要出发,分清主次,定好详略。要突出重点,详写细述那些能表现文章主题的重要情节,略写粗述那么非关键的次要情节。面面俱到反而使情节罗列化,使人不得要领。这一点是写好记叙文要解决的一个基本问题,也需要一定的技巧。如:
One night a man came to our house and told me, "There is a family with eight children。 They have not eaten for days。" I took some food with me and went。
When I finally came to that family, I saw the faces of those little children disfigured (破坏外貌) by hunger。 There was no sorrow or sadness in their faces, just the deep pain of hunger。
I gave the rice to the mother。 She divided the rice in two, and went out, carrying half the rice。 When she came back, I asked her, "Where did you go?" she gave me this simple answer, "To my neighbors — they are hungry also!"
3。 用活语言,准确生动
记叙文要用具体的事件和生动的语言对人、事、物加以叙述。一篇好的记叙文的语言既要准确、生动,又要表现力强,这样才能把人、事描写得具体生动,其可读性才强。试比较下面一篇例文修改的前后效果。
原文:
One day Xiaoqiang was wandering away。 He was soon lost among people and traffic。 He could not find the way back home and started crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by found him standing alone in front of a shop and crying。 They went up to Xiaoqiang and asked him what had happened。 Xiaoqiang told them how he got lost and where he lived。 The two students decided to take him home。 Mother was pleased to see Xiaoqiang come back safe and sound。 She invited the two students into the house and gave them some money, but they didn't take it。 She served them with tea but they left。
修改后:
The other day, five-year-old Xiaoqiang left home alone and wandered happily in the street。 After some time, he felt hungry so he wanted to go back home。 But he found he was lost among the crowded people and heavy traffic。 When he could not find the way home, he started and crying。 Just then, two young students who were passing by from school found him sanding crying in front of a shop。 They immediately went up to him。
"Little boy, why are you standing here crying?" they asked。
"I want Mom, I go home。" said the boy, still crying。
"Don't worry, we'll send you home。"
And they spent the next two hours looking for the boy's house。 With the help of a policeman, they finally found it。
When the worried mother saw her son come back safe and sound, she was so thankful and she invited the students into her house。 Gratefully, she offered them some money, saying it was a way to express her thanks, but the young students firmly refused it and left without even a cup of tea。
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